Broadjam Artist: Paul Reidy
Song: Run Out of Time
Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)
Pro General Comments: I know this is just a demo but having a female sing it in first person suggests the song is about her. My first comment is about the hook and how it is used. My preference if I'm only going to use the hook once is to end the song with the hook so it's the last thing my listener will hear and remember. In this case you start a fairly long chorus with the hook and never use it again. That's not the strongest use in my opinion. Start and end with it if possible. Keep in mind your listener won't have the benefit of reading your comments and questions below. They will only be listening to your lyric. My second comment on the lyric I had to speculate what the end was. Was it the end of a relationship. It didn't dawn on me it was death until she said they'll fold a flag say a short prayer. The fact that there's a flag suggests she was a soldier who was killed in a war or attack of some king maybe in Afghanistan. She's dead and she's singing the song in first person as a spirit or ghost. This is very unusual and the probability of finding someone to sing a song referring to them being dead in front of their fans friends and family is not very high in my opinion. The lyric suggests he or she was severely injured and Doctors told her the end was near. The story is sad and gloomy in my opinion. There's no mention of him or her feeling good about her sacrifice for the country or for their family. No mention of faith or an afterlife in Heaven etc. I'm not sure what the message is in this song. Is it we don't always get to choose how or when we're going to die? OK after reading your comments now I understand the story behind the song but it would be beneficial to put the real facts in the storyline somewhere. Musically this is very well done. Good vocal and great guitar work.
Quote From Pro: Paul Reidy writes about people and things that have touched him in his life. His heartfelt words and music will have an impact.