Month: April 2022

Broadjam Artist: Betty Lyles
Song: Prayer Time

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Malik Williams (Producer, Artist, Engineer, Composer)

Pro General Comments: Hello Betty,Thank you for the opportunity to review your work. I can really appreciate the theme behind this song. It was easy-listening and positively refreshing!I look the overall blend of your vocal, the movement of the bass in a more electronic performance was really interesting to me. The chorus vocals were performed and recorded well. You have a nice texture to your voice. The chorus lyrics work really well and your vocal tone is hopeful and dreamy that fits the lyrical theme of the song.I was surprised then the rap came in, in the verse. The male rap gave it a different and interesting way. I was looking for a verse 2 rap as well. Maybe you should consider that. No other artist really came to mind when I started listening. I liked the blend of musical styles between the echoed bass, female chorus vocals and male rap. The guitar parts are played nicely as well. It's an interesting blend of R&B or Pop music. Regarding the production on the song... in my opinion, the lead vocal sounds good in relation to the rap verse. The vocals are produced in a simple fashion that works for this song. The bottom end - Kick and bass could be fatter/wider, and up in the mix to blend better with the mid-range keys and guitar. The arrangement of the song could use a second verse and smoother musical ending. The drum programming, bass line and instrumentation works well for this song. I was mostly pointing out mix issues that could be tweaked. Sometimes finding the right sounds is most of the battle. If you have limited choices, then tweaking the individual instruments in your mix will generally do the trick. Referencing the mix on different speakers is typically necessary - Something to think about trying if you choose to re-mix this song, or at least ideas to keep in mind for the next song. Good luck!

Quote From Pro: I can really appreciate the theme behind this song. It was easy-listening and positively refreshing!

Broadjam Artist: Dale Lawrence WOKEPOETS.COM
Song: PRETZEL LOGIK

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Tom Worth (Songwriter, Producer, Pro Songwriting Coach)

Pro General Comments: Another pro sounding track - recording is radio ready!I like everything about the recording/vocals/mix. Rhyme schemes, song structure, phrasing are all great. I like the double verse but then just a single verse after 1st chorus. You clearly know what you're doing!Lyrics are very good! I have a few suggestions...Verse 1It's good as is, but I think it could be even better by being more specific. For example - instead of "loved him from the start" maybe something like "loves him with all her heart." I know it's 1 more syllable but I think that (or something like it) paints a deeper picture of the girl. Similarly, I'd like to see you dig a little deeper than "tear their world apart." I know it's only 9 syllables but if possible I'd love to hear something more specific. Even a subtle change like "and someday he'll tear her world apart." Verse 2Very cool 2nd line "casting couch" but I don't think people will get it. I had to think about it. This is such a relevant and important story that I'd rather it be clear that cool. That being said maybe just say "Casting call." Chorus is great! Love the hook.Verse 3Overall I love it - but the first line kind of implies he's never had enough to eat his entire life which probably isn't true. I think it'd be more representative and real to say something like "there's a ghost on the street (love that by the way) just looking for something to eat." I know that doesn't sing well but something like that. 2nd line - I don't think you need the word "and" before "he's doing time."Bridge:I like it...but I'm afraid it's sounding a bit preachy and judgmental to more people than just the ass holes doing the bad things you've discussed in lyrics. I'd consider re writing this section. Maybe something along the idea of we all (good and bad people) have the pretzel logic in our mind but most are able to deal with it while others use it as an excuse to do the bad things you're referring to in verses. Another approach would be talking like a super hero vigilante or something to get rid of these jerks. I say that because of the next section where you talk about cyanide.3rd ChorusI'd switch the order of the next two 4 line sections. In other words, have the original chorus after bridge and then add on the "you can shoot 'em in the back..." section.I hope this helps. Great writing, singing, production, etc!! Keep up the GREAT work!

Quote From Pro: Another pro sounding track - recording is radio ready!