Broadjam Artist: Randal Dunkle
Song: Who's Gonna Turn On A Light (Selsky/Dunkle)
Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Tirk Wilder (Songwriter, Performer)
Pro General Comments: Randal,First of all I have to say that reviewing any song that has Jesus uplifted in it is very hard for me. How can I say anything negative about it? It is in service to my Lord and Savior. THAT fact alone makes it a worthy effort.I don't often get songs that rock this HARD, either. Shame hardly anybody sends me this genre.My only suggestions would be for you to consider these thoughts:In the chorus, When you come to the words "about Christ", the melody goes down. The words also have the same meter as every other word in the line.I would have those words go WAY HIGHER than anything else in the line, and I would stretch them out almost to half note size. They need to be EMPHASIZED. HE is the reason for the song, and I believe His Name should BLATANTLY stand out somehow.I would also say that I am not crazy about the lyric in the second verse AFTER the phrase "Lord, we love you day and night". I believe you can do a little better than what you have following that phrase.The reason I say that is that your rhyme pattern in the first verse, "lights" rhymes with "tonight". In the second verse, "night" does not rhyme with "back", and your rhyme pattern is broken. The second line "but help us not to simply set aside what's going on outside" seems a little weak to me. From everything else I see here, I can see that YOU can do better than that.The only other thing I might mention is that the effects you have on the lead vocal might be a tad heavy. The reason I say that is that the lyrics were a bit difficult to understand with that much reverb and delay on them.Hey, this song is about HIM. Let's make sure that even the casual listener gets that, right?Rock on, buddy. TESTIFY!
Quote From Pro: This artist could rock the Christian world!
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