Broadjam Artist: MITSH
Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Diana Williamson (Songwriter, Music Supervisor)
Pro General Comments: Please note I don't rate individual instrumentation since my expertise lies more in marketability, lyric, melody, and overall performance.Song has good energy and attitude. It moves along nicely. There are no dead moments. Verses are kinda spoken- which for some reason reminds me of some of the Cure's hits. See how they build the arrangements and add dynamics...They may be good for you to study to get some ideas.https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8Dhn_iIQXDEGood build to chorus which is important. Your hook stands out which is good. You might even want to emphasize the melodic build a bit more here to really make it come in with a huge impact and make it more memorable. Nice use of rhyme in your hook- the more the merrier!Interesting vibe and some cool arrangement flavors you have going on. It shows you are developing a good handle on this genre... The breakdown is catchy- where you repeat "day by day".....Old school vibe and Interesting percussive elements. That bouncy keyboard part adds a good color- nice.Perhaps you may want to cowrite with a lyricist who can help bring more organization to the storyline. Right now the story/idea seems a little confusing, hard to follow.For eg who exactly is "he"? Who is the singer and why are they singing about this person? Usually a title is your main "hook." The word fake could be an interesting title- it suggests alot of things. But we need more. Why is this person fake? What is the oppositte of fake? How are they oppositte? You want to make your listener care. What is at stake here? It seems a little vague.A song should have a beginning, middle and end. What has changed by the ending? Make sure your lyric has an arc- where something has changed by the end. This is what makes a song interesting.Good song development. You have the right tools. With some tweaking of the lyric, you will have a solid song. Good luck.
Quote From Pro: Song has great momentum and flavourful arrangements, the chorus comes in with a bang like it should.
Broadjam Artist: MITSHSong: FakeBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Diana Williamson (Songwriter, Music Supervisor)Pro General Comments: Please note I don’t rate individual instrumentation since my expertise lies more in marketability, lyric, melody, and overall pe…
Broadjam Artist: MITSH