Broadjam Artist: MoBack
Song: Come to me
Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)
Pro General Comments: Hi Monique, The form above requires that i evaluate the demo but I hear you. I had to pick someone so I picked Lady Gaga as the sounds like artist...she's as good as it gets right now... This isn't at all bad for a home demo. Lyrically this song plays it safe. There's nothing new in the lyric that hasn't already been said before in other songs but in this genre repetition and easy to remember lyrics win out over meaningful and creative lyrics. Bottom line is yes it's generic but it's catchy and memorable. The drum track is key to pop dance...make sure you pay attention to what the current pop dance hits are and try to capture their drum sounds especially the kick drum...overall the work demo gets the song across well...3:53 is within commercial radio time restraints but 3:35 would increase your chances of success...your vocal was a little pitchy on the low notes...try raising the key a half step to give it a little more brightness...melodies are all good...phrasing is good...rhyme is good...When you do a master demo this song will be a good pitch to movies and television libraries as well as indie pop artists around the world...think J-pop and K-pop as well...tempo could be a few more bpm's faster to give it more energy...This is a good start to a commercial pop dance song...I'd prefer a few more images and actions in the lyric but that's subjective.
Quote From Pro: Monique is an up and coming songwriter and producer. I foresee great things in her future. She possesses the musical skill and talent to succeed.
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