Broadjam Artist: Jay Lindsey Graham
Song: SEX MAGNET
Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Diana Williamson (Songwriter, Music Supervisor)
Pro General Comments: Please note I don't rate individual instrumentation since my expertise lies more in marketability, lyric, melody, and overall performance.You have some interesting arrangement ideas going on here. The song has a good peppy feel going for it. The female vocal has a nice sense of angst and urgency. You may want to enhance it with some cool bg's/harmonies.The beat rocks. You seem to have a good melodic and arrangement sense- your tune develops and doesn't get stale which is often the case in dance.The rhythmic breakdown works nicely before the hook kicks in.Your title is intriguing enough. You might want to milk it a bit more. Carly Simon singing "you walked into the party- like you were walking onto a yacht"- will be forever ingrained in pop music history- talking about a vain lover in Your So Vain. Those kind of details -visual details engage your listener.You may want to play around a bit more with the idea of the man drawing her in- if the song is called Sex Magnet. It's there in her vocal desperation which is nice but could be developed a little with perhaps "why" he is coming after her. What is so sexy about him? Add some new rhymes- the more -the merrier. "I'm the queen of pain- (don't want to go down that road again")?... Give us a bit more description - it's interesting but it would be better with a few more details.It would be good to have a turnaround at the end- of your story- such as she gives in at the end- or something new happens.Nice instrumental -with the Spanish style vibe- keeps it interesting, I might even add more throughout 'cause it works nicely. Not many songs in dance that I hear - have that kinda feel going on- milk it. Use your strengths.
Quote From Pro: Writer has a good melodic and arrangement sense on this fun ditty- Sex Magnet.