Broadjam Artist: Charles Edmund Carter
Song: Comin Home to You
Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Tirk Wilder (Songwriter, Performer)
Pro General Comments: There is much I like about this song, but there is also a lot I would suggest you might want to look at. First, I would like to say that your lead singer is excellent. Very high-powered pop voice with just enough country twang to turn it all into a blues.Secondly, I would like to say that your production is pretty strong. Thirdly, your song DOES have something to say. There is a coherent story, after the second listening.I have to wonder about prosody. The instrumental mix has a dark, foreboding, bluesy sound that doesn't fit the lyrics that well. It doesn't seem to be the groove that would lift this lyrical idea to where it wants to be, in my humble opinion.I mean, think about it. The hero in the song has made the right decision, is not going to mess up his current relationship for a fling with an old flame. This is GOOD news. It needs to have musical underpinnings that reflect that.There is a convention I utilize in my reviews. It's called "TCL", and it goes like this.Our Moms & Dads, sisters, brothers, what have you, all love the songs we write. But they are not the ones whose opinions mean the most.That honor falls upon a person who I call The Casual Listener (TCL). TCL doesn't know us. He/she has never heard of us. The only thing he/she has to go by is our SONG.I will refer to TCL in this review, so it's necessary I explain all that. Back to the song.Okay, now were going line by lyric line."A lover from my distant past from Dallas beckoned me."How about "...Dallas CALLED me"? Nobody says, "She BECKONED me". Make it more conversational, wherever you can. Just to nitpick, the preposition before "Dallas" should be "in", not "from"."Got into my pickup and drove reluctantly"Really? I'm not so sure about the "reluctantly" thing.When this chick first calls you, you're in anticipation of a hot weekend. It's not until your further on down the road that the reluctance comes in.(Continued in "Artist's Submitted Question" section)
Quote From Pro: Charles Edmund Carter is on the verge of becoming a top writer.