COLD LONELY HOUSE by MGB

Broadjam Artist: MGBSong: COLD LONELY HOUSEBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Doug Diamond (Music Supervisor, Engineer, Producer, Composer )Pro General Comments: Hi MGB -Thanks for letting me know about “Cold Lonely House”. I can’t recall a song written about the …

MGB

Broadjam Artist: MGB
Song: COLD LONELY HOUSE

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Doug Diamond (Music Supervisor, Engineer, Producer, Composer )

Pro General Comments: Hi MGB -Thanks for letting me know about "Cold Lonely House". I can't recall a song written about the loss of someone and the empty space that person leaves in another's life. A very unique idea. I applaud you for the creative aspect of the approach it takes in dealing with the issue. After hearing this song several times, all I can say is 'Wow, that is HEAVY'. But it is... and only in a good way from a songwriting standpoint. I really love this song. From my perspective the man singing just lost his wife to a disease/illness (based on the lyric in the Bridge - "And I know they did all they could do"). Heavy. Heart-wrenching. Sad. Distraught. Life. This may be the best song I've heard that portrays the helplessness and loss one would feel in that situation. Absolutely unfathomable how sad it is - and it happens everyday... where literally all you can do is hit your knees and pray to God nothing else would fill the void.For the subject matter and creativity, I'd give this song an A+. Same for the lyrics and the singer's ability to render it in a way that feels REAL. A+ for production value and all performances too. Crystal-clear sound and is mixed very well. Somehow, in all of that heartache, you've still managed to write a memorable main melody / hook too, which is amazing.Even though, I personally have not gone through this scenario in life, I can imagine how I would feel if I lost my wife - and this song NAILS IT.Unbelievably good job overall. Nothing to add or take away from my perspective. I would say this song is ready to go and would be a perfect heavy-hitter for the right scene in a film or television show - bringing the audience to tears. It's ready... finding that 'right fit' is VERY DIFFICULT from a music supervision standpoint, so having this song in the right catalog or with the right publisher would be key in my opinion. Radio would probably like this song too - because so many people have gone through exactly what this song speaks to.Very well done and congrats on what might be a perfect song about loss and the feelings it would no doubt bring to those left behind.I will try to keep it in mind in my future music sync placement endeavors in case I ever run across the perfect fit for it. It is highly specific, but because of that the perfect sync spot does exist, it's just a matter of holding out until is shows.Thanks and great work!Best,Doug

Quote From Pro: "Cold Lonely House" might be the perfect song you hope you NEVER have to identify with: the loss of a loved one - and the emptiness one would feel thereafter. Excellent vocals, lyrics, production, and melody creates a one-of-a-kind, very unique song that is dripping with detail, describing exactly what it must feel like to lose someone close to you where every mundane detail in life - is now dreadful - because that person is gone. Well done. A+ overall.

Maybe Tomorrow by Paul Reidy

Broadjam Artist: Paul ReidySong: Maybe TomorrowBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)Pro General Comments: Beautiful heartfelt song about a little girl with cancer wanting to know when she can go home. The mother fears the wo…

Paul Reidy

Broadjam Artist: Paul Reidy
Song: Maybe Tomorrow

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)

Pro General Comments: Beautiful heartfelt song about a little girl with cancer wanting to know when she can go home. The mother fears the worst but tries her best to give her daughter hope and says maybe tomorrow. nice imagery in the verses especially verse 2 which i feel makes a better verse 1...the current first verse isn't as strong visually in my opinion. the rhyme and phrasing are unpredictable and caught me off guard in a few places...the meter felt forced in spots. I would have preferred a more natural flow. The melodies are good it's the rhyme meter and phrasing i'm concerned with especially if you want your listener to remember the words and music. Your prosody is good. Childhood cancer is a very sad and serious subject matter and finding a major artist who would feel comfortable singing in first person about their daughter with cancer might be difficult at best. songs like this are usually stronger in third person where the singer is telling the story of the little girl and her mom. just a suggestion. This type of song might be used in a St. Jude Hospital promotion or in a documentary about childhood cancer. Because of the length and subject matter I'm not hearing this song as a radio friendly song. I absolutely love the guitar work...beautifully done. The vocal is also strong.

Quote From Pro: Paul Reidy's "Maybe Tomorrow" is a truly beautiful touching, heartfelt and inspirational song dealing with childhood cancer and a mother doing her best to give her daughter hope for tomorrow.

Open Up by Rick Landers

Broadjam Artist: Rick LandersSong: Open UpBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)Pro General Comments: I understand the perspective you are coming from in writing this song. There will be listener’s who do not know Nick Drake …

Rick Landers

Broadjam Artist: Rick Landers
Song: Open Up

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)

Pro General Comments: I understand the perspective you are coming from in writing this song. There will be listener's who do not know Nick Drake or will relate to this story line. your music is very interesting and entertaining. The unpredictable nature of the song kept me listening. Instrumentally and vocally this shows a lot of talent and skill. Lyrically i was lost from the from verse. Why is the singer asking her to open up? Why was she smiling and why did she stop smiling? Why is her world as lost and found as his world? I have no clue what this song is about. Your black eyed dog steals you away is a cool line but i don't know what it means...now the singer is angry with her telling her he's given her his best but she's too blind to see. What did he give her and what exactly is she not seeing? Remember your listener can't read your mind and they can only see what you show them. Not quite ready suggests she might be ready later on...what hope is there for this relationship? The Prosody is strange. Musically very upbeat, happy, positive but lyrically gloomy, sad and dark...

Quote From Pro: Rick Landers is an instrumental virtuoso and his music is destined to be in movie and television as well as commercials and advertising. His melodies are catchy and memorable.

If I’d Given My Heart to You by Rick Landers

Broadjam Artist: Rick LandersSong: If I’d Given My Heart to YouBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)Pro General Comments: Be careful not to use you so many times or you rhymes in verse 1.I count 26 total used in the song and…

Rick Landers

Broadjam Artist: Rick Landers
Song: If I'd Given My Heart to You

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)

Pro General Comments: Be careful not to use you so many times or you rhymes in verse 1.I count 26 total used in the song and that is not something i would advise you to make a habit of. You should purposely avoid you rhymes or the word you in the verses or bridge...Using a specific year like 72 describes 48 years ago and makes the singer around 65 years old...I'd try i'm sittin' in my truck bought back in 02...that makes the singer around 35...barbed wire is definitely an interesting choice...duct tape is an option...gin is rarely used in a country song...drinking straight gin from a bottle is not appealing to me but that's subjective...how long have you been lonely...the bigger question is why didn't you give your heart to her? Verse 3 is very cliche'. Avoid cliche's...they are someone else's words. Be more creative and original every chance you get...prosody is important. The music is bright and full of energy but the lyric is dark and gloomy. Love the mix and choice of instruments. Very strong vocal...catchy melodies

Quote From Pro: Impressed that this is your first country song. In my opinion this is a strong first step down a red dirt country road. Good luck in your musical journey.

Sumthins Bout 2 Change by Stoneman

Broadjam Artist: StonemanSong: Sumthins Bout 2 ChangeBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Cortez Farris (Producer and Engineer)Pro General Comments: Positive Comments:This song is Hot! The groove is outstanding! This song is a great cross between funk, soul, R&B, bl…

Stoneman

Broadjam Artist: Stoneman
Song: Sumthins Bout 2 Change

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Cortez Farris (Producer and Engineer)

Pro General Comments: Positive Comments:This song is Hot! The groove is outstanding! This song is a great cross between funk, soul, R&B, blues and pop! The vocals are slick and to the point.The background harmony vocals are classic and done very well. The lead vocal is also performed well. Your voice carries the emotion for this song well. The rap part is awesome, it flows perfectly with the song.I also like the clear disctinction between the verse and the chorus. The energy of the vocals are matched well with the energy and flow of the song. I'm very impressed with the rythm guitar licks. The tone of the guitar is perfect.The bassline is distinct and in the pocket grooves very well with the drums.The mix is clear and professional. This song has a lot of potential for music licensing opportunities.

Quote From Pro: This song is Hot! The groove is outstanding! This song is a great cross between funk, soul, R&B, blues and pop! The vocals are slick and to the point.

The Healing by Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee CarpenterSong: The HealingBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Cortez Farris (Producer and Engineer)Pro General Comments: Positive comments:This is a very powerful song! The lyrics by its self reads like a poem.The lead vocal is very strong…

Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee Carpenter
Song: The Healing

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Cortez Farris (Producer and Engineer)

Pro General Comments: Positive comments:This is a very powerful song! The lyrics by its self reads like a poem.The lead vocal is very strong. The background vocals are very good.The mix is clean and ready for prime-time and the songwriting is very visual and I really like the creative way you have expressed your emotion in this song. I also really like the build up of the song. The arrangement is really good. The minimual instrumentation in the beginning of the song helps add to the emotion of the song and the energy of the song. I love the introduction of new rhythms as the song progresses. This song has a great deal of potential for licensing opportunties. The lyrics and the vocal delivery are matched perfectly. The guitar is very clean and melodic a very good choice for this tune.Constructive comments:I would add possibly a bass line, not in the beginning of the song but in the middle of song for impact.I would also make a clearer distinction between the verse and the chorus .Either by take something out or adding something new, simular to what you did with the drums, that build up is great . You could add/subtract another instrument or a vocalto keep the song even more exciting all the way throught the song.The mix is great also. The vocal recording and mix is also great . I would bring the vocals up at 2:18 until the end of the song this sounds like the chorus of the song

Quote From Pro: This is a very powerful song! The lyrics by its self reads like a poem.

COLD LONELY HOUSE by MGB

Broadjam Artist: MGBSong: COLD LONELY HOUSEBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)Pro General Comments: Overall, this is very strong. A nicely written lyric and melody, great production and a solid vocal. My main concern is that it feels a…

MGB

Broadjam Artist: MGB
Song: COLD LONELY HOUSE

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)

Pro General Comments: Overall, this is very strong. A nicely written lyric and melody, great production and a solid vocal. My main concern is that it feels a bit more like late 90s early 00s country than the current radio sound, though there are a few artists like Cody Johnson (and even Luke Combs to some extent) who are doing more of these throwback tunes. That said, one thing that has to change to pitch this is the length of the song. A ballad at 420 is a very difficult pitch. Now, if you're the artist, and this is your ballad, that's okay, but if you want other artists to cut it, try to get a version down to three and a half minutes for sure. The trick with ballads is that most artists only put one on each album, so it's really tough to get those cut. This could slide into midtempo territory with a few bpms up, which could be worthwhile depending on your intent with the song. I like the singer a lot, and the production is good (only a little past tense, just enough to slip through). The topic/lyric has been written often, but this one feels unique enough that I don't expect that to come into play at all. Overall, better writing than a lot of what I review, and definitely a very strong presentation.

Quote From Pro: Well-sung, gorgeous throwback country ballad about the heartache of a lonely house, sung with conviction and written with a storytelling heart.

This Feeling by Daniel

Broadjam Artist: DanielSong: This FeelingBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Jonathan Stone (Publisher)Pro General Comments: Very good contemporary pop song that I feel would work well for covers and sync use. “This Feeling” is a pop ballad that reminds me a little…

Daniel

Broadjam Artist: Daniel
Song: This Feeling

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Jonathan Stone (Publisher)

Pro General Comments: Very good contemporary pop song that I feel would work well for covers and sync use. "This Feeling" is a pop ballad that reminds me a little of "In The Air Tonight" by Phil Collins although not as "heavy". It's simply a love song about a boy and his feelings. Its not really treading on any new territory here it is however very well done all the way around. Production, songwriting and performance. I also feel this song would be very well suited for sync uses as it does not get too specific lyrically. It just talks a lot about"This Feeling" which is actually perfect for film and tv use. In the sync world many times if a lyric gets too specific it will take the song out of contention for many opportunities. Many or your most licensed songs in this area are designed to be vague lyrically so as not to get corned in to just certain uses. Well this doesn't do that and therefore I have little doubt that if the artist here goes after it he will succeed in getting this song and track used many times over for sync use. Good luck!

Quote From Pro: Daniels version of "This Feeling" gets high marks for production, performance, and writing. It's a contemporary pop song in the vein of a Harry Styles or Justin Bieber and is definitely worthy of your attention. Love it!

I Wish You Love For Christmas by Bob Birthisel

Broadjam Artist: Bob BirthiselSong: I Wish You Love For ChristmasBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)Pro General Comments: Bob, It’s very difficult to mix religious content and secular content…most of your first verse is …

Bob Birthisel

Broadjam Artist: Bob Birthisel
Song: I Wish You Love For Christmas

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)

Pro General Comments: Bob, It's very difficult to mix religious content and secular content...most of your first verse is a loving wish of one person wishing love to another but then you end the verse by bringing God into the story...yes he is the reason for the season but my advice is choose between secular and religious...write two versions if necessary but I would not mix the two worlds. Just my preference and opinion...the form/structure is alternative meaning it doesn't follow a standard popular form/structure...if it's chorus/verse/chorus/verse/chorus...the problem here is the lyric changes in all three choruses...you could look at this form as verse/bridge/verse/bridge/verse but in this form the bridge lyric is repeated...either way this is not consistent with standard form/structure...does it need to be...no if you are the writing this for yourself to sing and promote...i would also prefer the hook be used in the last line of the song...first chorus is about love...2nd chorus is about world peace and the birth of Jesus...last chorus repeats the first chorus and ends with the singer being glad they are still with the person they love to start another year...there's nothing overtly wrong with any of this but i honestly believe mixing secular and religious is not a great idea if you want a major pop or country artist to cut this...the first verse or bridge is very secular...repeating a chorus or a bridge is helpful if you want your listener to remember the words and music...this song is unpredictable which also makes it interesting...good solo section...good vocal...this would be ok to pitch

Quote From Pro: Bob Birthisel's vocals are smooth and free flowing Ala Michael Buble and his delivery is emotional and uplifting. His melodies are well crafted and memorable and his lyrics are conversational and from the heart.

Reading Between the Lines – Female by Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee CarpenterSong: Reading Between the Lines – FemaleBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)Pro General Comments: I don’t love this. The singer sounds more like a 70s/80s disco pop singer, rather than anything current…

Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee Carpenter
Song: Reading Between the Lines - Female

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)

Pro General Comments: I don't love this. The singer sounds more like a 70s/80s disco pop singer, rather than anything current, which leaves the songs sounding generally outdated more with this version than the male. Once again, your production qualities are top notch. The songwriting is good, but the melody also feels outdated (I'm not sure why it hits me harder with her singing, but it takes it back a few decades). That said, it's a big, moving ballad which is always a good pitch for tv and film. That's my best suggestion for this version. I'm not sure there are any current pop or country stars (female) that are doing this style right now. The male vocalist has such a fantastic vocal ability that he really transcends time on things for me. This girl is good, but not current. I would suggest you focus mostly on the male pitch for this one unless you see the right match on a pitch sheet. Again, solid writing, far above notch production skills, just not a performance that knocks me out like so many of your other songs do. And as I always say, it's important for you to start finding your sweet spot as a writer/producer. There's a consistency in a lot of your other submissions that is already defining it, whereas this version of the song seems like an outlier. Melodically, this plays up some of your retro tendencies and the track is more a straight homage to those rather than slightly inventive, which I feel you do well. Keep going the indie rock / unique path, I feel it really holds a lot of great opportunities for your skills.

Quote From Pro: Big '80s style pop ballad delivered with intense vocals, great drama for your sync needs.