Reading Between The Lines by Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee CarpenterSong: Reading Between The LinesBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)Pro General Comments: I really like this one a lot – it feels like it could be an 80s Erasure/Depeche Mode synth pop track or a modern…

Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee Carpenter
Song: Reading Between The Lines

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)

Pro General Comments: I really like this one a lot - it feels like it could be an 80s Erasure/Depeche Mode synth pop track or a modern song by Ed Sheeran. Once again, I don't like the fade on the track. It's just not as common any more and I think you are selling your hooks short by fading them out. The fade works here better than it does on the other tune, but I still think you should avoid them for pitches right now. This is a very strong vocal performance. A lovely vibrato and a lot of emotion in this take. This is a stronger mix overall, no changes needed. Once again, I like that you establish your hook right at the top. I wouldn't mind a bit more development lyrically in your chorus. I would also love for you to send lyrics along with your submissions so I can dig in a bit more on the tune. Overall, this is great craftmanship. It's not right on the nose for current pop radio, but I do think it's awesome for sync pitches and if you are the artist, ready for release. Moving, interesting and well produced and mixed. Just the right hint of sadness and hope across the board. It's nice to see you can be technical and emotional. That's hard for a lot of songwriters.

Quote From Pro: A lonely song of longing and hope, sung extraordinarily well and mixed ready for a break-up scene in your favorite teen television drama.

Too Far Down the Line – Female by Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee CarpenterSong: Too Far Down the Line – FemaleBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)Pro General Comments: I really enjoyed this listen. I like that you set up the hook right at the top. Your singer sings this one …

Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee Carpenter
Song: Too Far Down the Line - Female

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)

Pro General Comments: I really enjoyed this listen. I like that you set up the hook right at the top. Your singer sings this one like she really means it, and that emotion carries this track very well. If anything it's a little long. The easy way to fix this is to shorten your musical breaks and solo. The lead guitar is way too loud in the mix as well. I would not fade out the way you did, let that chorus ring out a full one more time. Fade isn't happening much anymore on the radio, and this fade feels really forced. I was just rocking out and suddenly it disappeared almost like something was wrong with my speakers. Let it rock! You may want to consider a brokendown chorus to get into the song, and possibly a half chorus, giving you more space to vamp at the end. Nice work overall. I would listen again.

Quote From Pro: Halfway between female empowerment and a moving on song, "Too Far Down the Line" is a great melody and awesome vocal you'll be singing along to before the first chorus is over. It feels both modern and familiar, and would be a great addition to a modern female country record, or a positive television/film scene.

In that moment by Paul Reidy

Broadjam Artist: Paul ReidySong: In that momentBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)Pro General Comments: The emotion behind this song is unfortunately something we may all have to face (if we haven’t already). My concerns with this song…

Paul Reidy

Broadjam Artist: Paul Reidy
Song: In that moment

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)

Pro General Comments: The emotion behind this song is unfortunately something we may all have to face (if we haven't already). My concerns with this song are mostly that it feels outdated - it feels more like the folk artists of the 1960s, or even Carole King from the 1970s, which are a tough sell these days. However, I do really like the emotion in it. The music, however, feels pretty positive against a very sad lyric. The chorus lyric feels well done to me, it's clear and both resigned and sad and hopeful at the same time. I don't know if there's a place for this genre as is right now. It's far from modern pop or country, but could find a home in the indie folk/singer/songwriter/Americana world. If you are an artist yourself, I think this is a good tune to be performing out that will likely get a heartfelt audience response. It's not a song for pitch in commercial music though.

Quote From Pro: A well-written and sentimental look at how quickly life passes.

Broken Flowers by Howard Siden

Broadjam Artist: Howard SidenSong: Broken FlowersBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Jonathan Weiss (Music Supervisor, A&R)Pro General Comments: Howard, I enjoyed listening to this well written and solidly structured instrumental piece that haa an authentic emotion…

Howard Siden

Broadjam Artist: Howard Siden
Song: Broken Flowers

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Jonathan Weiss (Music Supervisor, A&R)

Pro General Comments: Howard, I enjoyed listening to this well written and solidly structured instrumental piece that haa an authentic emotional tone to it's melody, instrumentation and melodic elements. The influence here is reminiscent of something that Santana would've done as an album cut on one of his records in the 80's or 90's, with organ, bass, percussion and drums accompaniment. I thought the structure of the song was well conceived and did a good job of setting up the main melody of the song, verse, chorus and bridge sections, which gave it an appropriate amount of sectional and dynamic contrast. The guitar playing was solid and authentic sounding, nice intonation and a great amount of emotion put forward. While all of those elements were nicely put together structurally and song wise, something to think about in future recordings would be to get the most updated guitar sound down on tape, as well as authentic sounding drums, bass and synth strings. This would give the track more of a contemporary production sound that is more rooted in the 2000's, rather than something that would've been produced in the 80's or 90's. Perhaps this is still in a demo stage, which in fact does a fine job of getting across the emotion of the song, (which is quite strong), but possibly the next time you're going to record, I would suggest you put a greater emphasis on finding the most up to date sample packs for the previously mentioned elements (strings, synth bass, trap drums etc.) to achieve a production level that would be in line with what's being heard on commercial or streaming radio in 2019. Again, this kind of heart wrenching, emotional instrumental power ballad a la Santana I believe still has a place in today's music world, especially when its as well conceived and written as this piece is. However, putting together all of the appropriate contemporary production elements are also an important piece of putting together a package which can be marketed to today's commercial market.

Quote From Pro: Emotional and heartfelt instrumental power ballad that features a lead melody from a solidly played electric guitar that is ultimately reminiscent of some of Santana's instrumental pieces that he became famous for throughout the last four decades.

Whiskey In my coffee by Paul Reidy

Broadjam Artist: Paul ReidySong: Whiskey In my coffeeBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)Pro General Comments: This has a retro rock feel to it much like the female rock artists of the eighties and nineties Ala Pat Benatar …

Paul Reidy

Broadjam Artist: Paul Reidy
Song: Whiskey In my coffee

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)

Pro General Comments: This has a retro rock feel to it much like the female rock artists of the eighties and nineties Ala Pat Benatar and Lita Ford to name a couple. The form/structure is more alternative than commercial rock. The meter and phrasing of the three verses are different which affects the melody and might make it harder for your listener to remember the words and melody. I like 6 line verses. They are easy to rhyme and when they follow an AABCCB rhyme pattern they can be very catchy and memorable.Ice/Night/Black/Band/Hand/Land is AABCCC which is a close match. if you would have rhymed Black in line 6 it would be a perfect match.The second verse uses an AABBCC rhyme scheme which is very different than verse 1.Verse three has 8 lines and that affects the melody and phrasing which isn't something i would advise making a habit of. Symmetry is important if you are wanting to write commercial catchy memorable songs regardless of the genre. Verses should all have similar rhyme patterns, meter, phrasing and melody. There's an infusion of country lyrics in this rock arrangement as well. Whiskey in my coffee is a common country theme. The verses are all unpredictable which isn't a bad thing but i want you to keep in mind that it's important your listener can follow the lyric and music without being distracted by changes in rhyme, meter, phrasing and melody. The melodic hook you start the chorus with is good...it's rock and it's familiar...easy to remember and sing. The chorus starts strong then it wanders a little because of it's length. I'd prefer a shorter chorus and I'd prefer you end with the hook same as you started with the hook...means everything to me is not the hook...it's not memorable and lacks the impact of whiskey in my coffee in my opinion. Coffee is an E rhyme which you've supported so it should be easy to plug the hook into the last line.Here's an option to try. He's 100 proof pure caffeine he's the whiskey in my coffee. Just a suggestion. Songs about being in a band or being a singer are usually written by a singer who is in a band. This type of song is hard to pitch to singer/songwriters. The arrangement is close to four minutes which isn't bad. The bridge is an option which could also be used as a tag in the last chorus...The double tracking of the female vocal gave it an edge but it was a little pitchy on the higher notes. I like the energy of the groove.

Quote From Pro: Paul Reidy has a fun and positive spirit that is easy to feel in his music and lyric. He mixes retro rock with country rock which is appealing to all age groups.

Hooten’s Holler by Hank Thomas

Broadjam Artist: Hank ThomasSong: Hooten’s HollerBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)Pro General Comments: This song is a very enjoyable, fun and uplifting listen. My main reason for some lower rankings (the 3s out of 5) is because it’s…

Hank Thomas

Broadjam Artist: Hank Thomas
Song: Hooten's Holler

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)

Pro General Comments: This song is a very enjoyable, fun and uplifting listen. My main reason for some lower rankings (the 3s out of 5) is because it's outdated for current country music, and that may make it difficult if you want to pitch it or are looking for an artist deal. It sounds like a great song from the late 90s/early 2000s that a band like Shenandoah or Little Texas would do a great job with. I also think that the chorus could lift a little more. The melody in the chorus is very repetitive and it never takes us to the fun place a listener needs in a song like this one. I think it's just the top of the chorus that needs a kick to take us up there. The harmonies sound absolutely great by the way - solid, well done country singing. Overall, I feel like the mix is a little lackluster, across the board the sound is staying in one place and is lacking the dynamic to make it soar. I think it's in the mix and arrangement (and maybe that missing chorus lift) because the instruments are played very well and the lead vocal is a stellar performance as well. That leads me to believe it's the song itself missing the "X" factor to make it great. As is, it's good - but I have a feeling based on your stuff you can knock a homerun.

Quote From Pro: A get-down, super fun song that harkens back to the best of Shenandoah. Hank brings the party!

Everything You Need by Stefanie Johnson

Broadjam Artist: Stefanie JohnsonSong: Everything You NeedBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)Pro General Comments: Hi Stefanie, this one feels a little outdated to me, and slightly off brand for the other songs I’ve heard from you. I t…

Stefanie Johnson

Broadjam Artist: Stefanie Johnson
Song: Everything You Need

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)

Pro General Comments: Hi Stefanie, this one feels a little outdated to me, and slightly off brand for the other songs I've heard from you. I think it's the super high piano in the mix that throws me off at the start, as hearing such a clean piano played that way isn't that common in modern pop. I wouldn't mind it coming down in the mix a good bit, as it fights the vocal a little (and nothing should fight your vocal!). This song also struggles more with the originality issue. Lyrically it feels more pedestrian and a little boring, and the hook doesn't knock me out. Though the production and performances remain stellar, this song just leaves me wanting something more. I do see it as a good live song, as audiences love tempo and fun - but it may be no more than filler for an album in a recorded version and I am more than confident you have many stronger songs. This direction musically does feel like 15-20 years ago, so I caution you to stay closer to the Carrie / Pink / Kelly AC pop of the other songs, which will keep you current. As always, a lovely vocal and strong recording.

Quote From Pro: A rollicking tempo from Stefanie that keeps your toes tappin and your lighter in the air.

Craziest Woman by Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee CarpenterSong: Craziest WomanBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)Pro General Comments: The recording and vocal performance on this song is very compelling. You’ve got a very interesting vocal presence and this …

Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee Carpenter
Song: Craziest Woman

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)

Pro General Comments: The recording and vocal performance on this song is very compelling. You've got a very interesting vocal presence and this song really does it justice. I'm also a huge fan of the melodies across the board here. The shift between chorus and verse melody is superb. Great work. Once again, my main concern is with the lyrics. At times, the simplicity is cool - like the repetition of the chorus hook. It feels like both an insult and a sincere love statement, which is hard to accomplish (thank your awesome melody for that). But lines like "Take walks in the park and feed the birds, think of your smiles and I can hear your words" make me cringe. I think you can beat that, and make it much more compelling for the listener to get lost in. You've got a lot of cool elements happening here, and I'm a fan. Just focus on making your storylines and lyrics as unique as you can as you develop your writer voice.

Quote From Pro: Weirdly cool and original, Alan Lee Carpenter lets go of love with this laid-back break-up tune.

Hello Love by Stefanie Johnson

Broadjam Artist: Stefanie JohnsonSong: Hello LoveBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)Pro General Comments: I have very mixed feelings on this song. My first listen, I felt like there was so much going on lyrically that it was hard to re…

Stefanie Johnson

Broadjam Artist: Stefanie Johnson
Song: Hello Love

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)

Pro General Comments: I have very mixed feelings on this song. My first listen, I felt like there was so much going on lyrically that it was hard to really grab the hook and idea out of it, but once I dug in on the lyric sheet and relistened, it crystallized in a very cool way for me. But because so many people do just give things one listen, it may be worth streamling the first verse lyric as much as possible to make sure you're grabbing everyone's attention. I'm also torn on whether this hook is better served as "Dear Love" rather than "Hello Love", of course the problem there is that Maren Morris has a "Dear Hate" and it's more of a common approach. Once again, I love your vocal, and you knocked a homerun on this song as well. It's nice to hear your voice with just the basic arrangement, guitar and harmonies. This indicates you would do very well in a showcase in an office scenario, which is so common in Nashville these days. I'm curious to know more if your goal is to be a signed artist, or a songwriter for other artists. This will help me tailor future reviews better for your career. I'm a fan, keep up the strong work and get these songs out there.

Quote From Pro: One heck of a letter to love. Stefanie literally sings her heart out.

She Ain’t Love Me No More by Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee CarpenterSong: She Ain’t Love Me No MoreBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)Pro General Comments: Overall, this is a well-produced, well-sung and strongly-written song. This type of throwback, deep in the holle…

Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee Carpenter
Song: She Ain't Love Me No More

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)

Pro General Comments: Overall, this is a well-produced, well-sung and strongly-written song. This type of throwback, deep in the holler country is making a comeback (thank goodness) and there will be plenty of room for more artists as its popularity expands. This is a very simple lyric, but it's so nicely paired with the melody that I can let go of some of the cliches within. My criticism only is that the storyline and lyric could be developed further. The more unique and interesting the storyline is in this genre, the more compelling you become as an artist. Think of "White House Road" and it's very detailed images and places. That's what is missing here. I think you're on the right road though. Stick with your production team, and play this song out as much as you can. Don't be afraid to write and re-write lyrics as it progresses. For example: "Ain't no use in tellin no liesI been missin her badThis tune is telling me I oughta call herThis hearts tellin me that its sad". I think you can beat "my heart's tellin me that it's sad" with something much deeper and more personal that really blows the audience away. Those little changes are all this song needs.

Quote From Pro: Alan Lee Carpenter takes a page from the Tyler Childers' playbook and delivers a stompin', heart-achin' ode to lost love.