Alpha Dancer (Remix) by Hugo Bass

Hugo Bass

Broadjam Artist: Hugo Bass
Song: Alpha Dancer (Remix)

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Diana Williamson (Songwriter, Music Supervisor)

Pro General Comments: Please note I don't rate individual instrumentation since my expertise lies more in marketability, lyric, melody, and overall performance.Hi there, Hugo. First off you have a winning attitude. I always encourage people to give me truth and can't stand anyone who says they like something then secretly hates it. My one cardinal rule is to tell the truth- because that's how everyone LEARNS and gets better! The fact that you ask for the brutal truth is a feather in your cap! Of course you have to be careful who you listen to and disregard people with unworthy intentions. You are only going to grow and that's how you perfect your craft. So that is major step one.The good news is you have a great handle on this type of writing. You lured me in immediately with the intro and vibe. The song has a very cool vibe to it. The instrumentation and arrangement has a tasteful flavor that is easy on the ears.One of the easiest and overlooked things to fix is to always try to have a title with an emotional lure to it. Something that everyone immediately gets curious about. Alpha Dancer is interesting but could be more interesting. I'm left wondering what it means. For eg "Dancing in the Moonlight" suggests a midnight rendevous- so we're wondering "who" are the lovers- something relating to our own emotional experiences. So if it was something like "Dancing into Love" it makes it more personal for the listener because they can relate to it. Something to keep in mind.Great opening- nice feel. Nice choice of vocalist. Interesting vocal effect part round 48 & 2:48, some sonic bells and whistles give the track a fun feel.When verse comes in you might want to add a little more ear candy- you want it to build a little more rapidly. The vocal is mixed a little low in places so I can't really make out the lyrics. Lyrics are important so make sure we can hear them.When getting reviews- be sure to include them so you can get feedback on them.It seems that perhaps the rhymes may be a little forced (but since I can't really hear the words- a clearer mix would help- ) I can't say for sure- but humanity /sanity and dominant/prominent seem a bit awkward. The general rule is to keep lyrics conversational so they have a good flow to them. Prominent and humanity may be a bit formal for a song. Be careful on this.Lyric comes out off the top a little preachy- be very careful with this- big words such as "humanity" can scare someone off. Today's society is all about instant gratification - so if you want to say something important- you have to lure them into it. Music is escape for most people so you have to deliver escapism and then add something deep in a fun way so they don't realize they are being preached to. It's very hard to talk about issues without coming off preachy- it's a fine line. You don't want to alienate your listener.I can't seem to follow lyrical story. Part of it is the mix buries some of the words but I think also that the lyric may need a bit of going over. Make sure it progresses from the beginning and evolves. I like what you seem to be trying to do- (your intent) but it feels a bit confusing- as mentioned- when you keep it conversational versus overly poetic- it feels natural to the listener and flows.

Quote From Pro: Track has beautiful feel and suggests writer would be good at crafting commercials and scores.

I’m Lethal by Flava Hype

Flava Hype

Broadjam Artist: Flava Hype
Song: I'm Lethal

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Serge Durand (A&R/Publisher/Manager)

Pro General Comments: I think this is a good hip hop record. The hip hop purists appreciate songs like this. We're in a time now where rappers aren't rapping about anything with substance. Songs like this have a fan base because there are thousands of fans out there that feel like what you're rapping about. I like your raps on this song. I appreciated your word play. I also enjoyed the female rapper. She killed it. I would shoot a video to this song making fun of the rappers promoting the flashy/baller lifestyle and promote it to multiple hip hop blogs like Allhiphop, Hiphopdx, 2dopeboyz, etc... Just make sure that your vid is quality. Videos don't cost as much as they used to, but they still cost. You can get a decent video shot for $2500-5000 using a good camera nowadays. I think you have potential and a lane. Judging front the songs that I've heard from you is that you have a message. You're anti-gimmicks. That's a good thing, but it's a long road. The gimmicky guys come and go, but they catch fast. The route you're taking takes a while longer, but if you break you're fans will be loyal like J. Cole/Kendrick's fan base. Stick to your guns. Keep creating music with a message and promote your music as much as you can. Also put together a good team around you. You can't do it all by yourself.

Quote From Pro: Flava Hype has something to say and I think hip hop fans out there want to hear the message that he preaches in his music.

I’m Lethal by Flava Hype

Flava Hype

Broadjam Artist: Flava Hype
Song: I'm Lethal

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Serge Durand (A&R/Publisher/Manager)

Pro General Comments: I think this is a good hip hop record. The hip hop purists appreciate songs like this. We're in a time now where rappers aren't rapping about anything with substance. Songs like this have a fan base because there are thousands of fans out there that feel like what you're rapping about. I like your raps on this song. I appreciated your word play. I also enjoyed the female rapper. She killed it. I would shoot a video to this song making fun of the rappers promoting the flashy/baller lifestyle and promote it to multiple hip hop blogs like Allhiphop, Hiphopdx, 2dopeboyz, etc... Just make sure that your vid is quality. Videos don't cost as much as they used to, but they still cost. You can get a decent video shot for $2500-5000 using a good camera nowadays. I think you have potential and a lane. Judging front the songs that I've heard from you is that you have a message. You're anti-gimmicks. That's a good thing, but it's a long road. The gimmicky guys come and go, but they catch fast. The route you're taking takes a while longer, but if you break you're fans will be loyal like J. Cole/Kendrick's fan base. Stick to your guns. Keep creating music with a message and promote your music as much as you can. Also put together a good team around you. You can't do it all by yourself.

Quote From Pro: Flava Hype has something to say and I think hip hop fans out there want to hear the message that he preaches in his music.

A Soldier by Flava Hype

Flava Hype

Broadjam Artist: Flava Hype
Song: A Soldier

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Serge Durand (A&R/Publisher/Manager)

Pro General Comments: I think this is an admirable song. It has a lot of potential to be an American anthem. I think you did a great job of writing this song. I also like your conviction. You sound very believable. You sound passionate about being a soldier and being an American. I believe what you are saying. You have good story telling skills. If I was a soldier, I would listen to this every day when i woke up. It's a good motivational song. It doesn't strike me as a huge radio hit, but it can be a fan favorite because of the subject matter and the message. One doesn't have to be in the army to appreciate this record. They can just be a soldier in their own right with waking up everyday and conquering their dreams. I also appreciated the adlibs and the sound effects. I really enjoyed the 2nd verse.

Quote From Pro: Flava Hype's "A Soldier" is a great motivational record. He did a good job of telling his story, expressing his feelings and what he stands for on this record.

A Soldier by Flava Hype

Flava Hype

Broadjam Artist: Flava Hype
Song: A Soldier

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Serge Durand (A&R/Publisher/Manager)

Pro General Comments: I think this is an admirable song. It has a lot of potential to be an American anthem. I think you did a great job of writing this song. I also like your conviction. You sound very believable. You sound passionate about being a soldier and being an American. I believe what you are saying. You have good story telling skills. If I was a soldier, I would listen to this every day when i woke up. It's a good motivational song. It doesn't strike me as a huge radio hit, but it can be a fan favorite because of the subject matter and the message. One doesn't have to be in the army to appreciate this record. They can just be a soldier in their own right with waking up everyday and conquering their dreams. I also appreciated the adlibs and the sound effects. I really enjoyed the 2nd verse.

Quote From Pro: Flava Hype's "A Soldier" is a great motivational record. He did a good job of telling his story, expressing his feelings and what he stands for on this record.

I Could Get Used To This by Black Roses

Black Roses

Broadjam Artist: Black Roses
Song: I Could Get Used To This

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Serge Durand (A&R/Publisher/Manager)

Pro General Comments: I really like this song. I think it has a good feel to it. The hook is catchy and memorable. I like the subject matter. I think you did a great job writing this song. I also think the production is solid. It kind of reminds me of Robin Thicke's "Lost Without You." I thought the verses were also well written. You have a beautiful voice. You did a great job vocally. I have nothing bad to say about this song. I don't think it's a big radio hit, but it has great licensing potential. I would suggest that your management pitch this record to as many music supervisors as possible. It has Film/TV licensing potential. I would pitch it to multiple reality shows and upcoming movies. That's a great way to get discovered. When people hear it, they'll Shazam it and purchase it.This song makes me want to hear more form you. I would love to hear what the rest of your project sounds like.

Quote From Pro: 'I Could Get Use to This" is a great record. It makes me want to hear more from Black Roses. She has a special tone and voice. I'm a fan.

I Could Get Used To This by Black Roses

Black Roses

Broadjam Artist: Black Roses
Song: I Could Get Used To This

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Serge Durand (A&R/Publisher/Manager)

Pro General Comments: I really like this song. I think it has a good feel to it. The hook is catchy and memorable. I like the subject matter. I think you did a great job writing this song. I also think the production is solid. It kind of reminds me of Robin Thicke's "Lost Without You." I thought the verses were also well written. You have a beautiful voice. You did a great job vocally. I have nothing bad to say about this song. I don't think it's a big radio hit, but it has great licensing potential. I would suggest that your management pitch this record to as many music supervisors as possible. It has Film/TV licensing potential. I would pitch it to multiple reality shows and upcoming movies. That's a great way to get discovered. When people hear it, they'll Shazam it and purchase it.This song makes me want to hear more form you. I would love to hear what the rest of your project sounds like.

Quote From Pro: 'I Could Get Use to This" is a great record. It makes me want to hear more from Black Roses. She has a special tone and voice. I'm a fan.

LET’S RIDE by TaBoo Timmons

TaBoo Timmons

Broadjam Artist: TaBoo Timmons
Song: LET'S RIDE

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Serge Durand (A&R/Publisher/Manager)

Pro General Comments: I think this song has great licensing potential. I think the track can be mixed a little better. I think the hook is catchy and memorable. The verses are solid. I would pitch this song to NASCAR, video games, and Film/TV music supervisors. It doesn't strike me as a hit, but it doesn't have to be because it seems like it was written specifically for licensing usage. I think you have something with this record. I would suggest that you have your management pitch it to as manay music supervisors as possible.

Quote From Pro: I think "Let's Ride" is a great licensing song. Makes me mo want to hear more from Taboo Simmons.

LET’S RIDE by TaBoo Timmons

TaBoo Timmons

Broadjam Artist: TaBoo Timmons
Song: LET'S RIDE

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Serge Durand (A&R/Publisher/Manager)

Pro General Comments: I think this song has great licensing potential. I think the track can be mixed a little better. I think the hook is catchy and memorable. The verses are solid. I would pitch this song to NASCAR, video games, and Film/TV music supervisors. It doesn't strike me as a hit, but it doesn't have to be because it seems like it was written specifically for licensing usage. I think you have something with this record. I would suggest that you have your management pitch it to as manay music supervisors as possible.

Quote From Pro: I think "Let's Ride" is a great licensing song. Makes me mo want to hear more from Taboo Simmons.

One More River to Cross by One More River Music

One More River Music

Broadjam Artist: One More River Music
Song: One More River to Cross

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Diana Williamson (Songwriter, Music Supervisor)

Pro General Comments: Please note I don't rate individual instrumentation since my expertise lies more in marketability, lyric, melody, and overall performance.I love murder ballads. Very solid song. It holds your interest. Hook stands out like it should. You have a good scope in your songwriting. The lyric is very solid. Melody works and arrangements enhance. Vocal tells the story well in a believable manner. So therefore what I say is just ways of making your song better- however you could possibly get it cut the way it is.Woman "spits on the evil man"- great visual. And so is "I called him out with the sun at my back ?He pushed his way through the door.?With a star on his chest and all dressed in black? He looked ready to fight this war." You really take the listener into your story with this type of description. Very good, you can just feel the darkness and struggle about to happen.Song has a good story- a western Count of Monte Cristo. In this day and age a woman would rarely stay with a devil for that long- so you might have wanted to put a little detail in there to add to it (for eg he says he'll get the man killed in jail if she leaves), etc.. My instinct says it sounds like a demo- not exactly something you would put in film and tv- but something worth pitching to an artist. I could also hear this song being really cool in a dark Americana vibe- this version has an almost friendly easy going feel. If you had some young buck with a twang in his voice beating his heart out with a darker edgy feel you could really make an impact of it. (banjos and steel guitar and female bg vocals) However that's not necessary but would be cool in a perfect world where we have unlimited $ for demos.Singer has a nice vocal timbre. Pronunciation sometimes gets lost which is very important in a story song so we can follow. I'd make that marshall "pay" the word pay kinda dissolves- when it should be yelled out with anger type of feel. Just something to watch out for.You got the hard stuff down- when your hook comes in- we want to sing along- good work.The guitar solo sounds a little easy going- which fits with the general mood but I was expecting something a little more blood thirsty- there is tons of blood, guts and vengeance going on here. Harmonica adds a great feel.Some bg vocals on the chorus- some cool female vocals might help build the hook up just a little more to help it over the top. Just to change up the dynamic a bit.You could have an outro which says something like-eg- the riverbed has a nice NEW field of daisies (subtley refer to the fact the lawman went missing- and they can live happily ever after) So your audience can rest with the knowledge it's a happily ever after.If you ever do re demo you may want to shorten intro and take out a few double choruses, maybe even the guitar solo to make song a bit shorter. Nowadays it seems songs really move along quickly when you are pitching. However as I said its very solid and worthy of pitching. An artist you want to cut that song should be able to hear how to make things a little snappier.You have a great feel for songwriting. Good luck and keep on writing!

Quote From Pro: Sergio you have solid songwriting instincts and good storytelling abilities. You bring the listener right into your story waiting for the climax.