Rock Paper Scissors by Warren Hein

Broadjam Artist: Warren HeinSong: Rock Paper ScissorsBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Chris Keaton (Music Publisher, Artist Manager, Song Plugger)Pro General Comments: Interesting conceptual song. The lyric and vocal draw the listener in and the song unfolds in…

Warren Hein

Broadjam Artist: Warren Hein
Song: Rock Paper Scissors

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Chris Keaton (Music Publisher, Artist Manager, Song Plugger)

Pro General Comments: Interesting conceptual song. The lyric and vocal draw the listener in and the song unfolds in a very compelling way. Not certain about where the song will eventually end up but it seems prime for a film or television placement.I'd love to hear more from this writer if there is more material. Please feel free to submit more for review at any time.The overall sense I get from the song is sadness and gloom but a slight notion of happiness (even if it is in memories.) The sparrow's nest is an intriguing idea. Very visual and mysterious, particularly in light of the fact that it is such a common item. Interesting concept here. Bravo!The lyric really does create very strong visuals. The breathiness of the vocal creates an eeriness but yet undeniable feeling. Very conversational and personal. It's almost as if the singer is speaking directly to me.The sparse track allows the vocal to drive the story without getting in the way or causing any distractions. The piano sound is marvelous (great recording technique!). The track breathes and has lots of space. I think the track is sensational!

Quote From Pro: Stark lyric and excellent storytelling.

Heartless Parade by Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee CarpenterSong: Heartless ParadeBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)Pro General Comments: Man, this one is great! An original title, fantastic lyric and yet another stellar vocal performance. I was curious to he…

Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee Carpenter
Song: Heartless Parade

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)

Pro General Comments: Man, this one is great! An original title, fantastic lyric and yet another stellar vocal performance. I was curious to hear all the California references because based on the other songs I assumed you were working out of the UK (I try not to look up too much about the artist/writer prior to reviewing so I'm not swayed by a bio or other peoples' thoughts on the music). This track has more of a modern indie band vibe, a little Seattle / Portland thing like The National, but still holding on to the pop sensibility and production. Your voice continues to be a home run for me, and this song really establishes more of your personality and lyric prowess. I do see this one working in sync as well, though it may be a more specific "yes this is perfect for the scene" thing, which really can take time but pay off greatly in the end. Production is stellar. Keep on this path, it's just a question of you writing "the" song. This one and "Roommate" to me establish your unique voice the most.

Quote From Pro: A fascinating, smart lyric about love and loss and regret delivered by a great vocalist with true pop sensibility. A must listen for music supervisors and song lovers across the board.

Reaching Out of Reach by Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee CarpenterSong: Reaching Out of ReachBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)Pro General Comments: The melody and lyric of “Reaching Out of Reach” is not as compelling as “Roommate”. I think you got a bit philosophi…

Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee Carpenter
Song: Reaching Out of Reach

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)

Pro General Comments: The melody and lyric of "Reaching Out of Reach" is not as compelling as "Roommate". I think you got a bit philosophical here, which puts this more as an album cut than a super-accessible single. It's a tougher one-time listen. I was thinking more about what you were trying to say rather than getting lost in the track. Per the others, the vocal is stellar. You are a really really good singer, ready for the radio and sync. This one lost me a little lyrically, but I think it would work for a full album. It might be a tougher television pitch because of the less-focused lyric, but once again the production is spot-on and professional, so you never know. Overall, I'm a fan of what I'm hearing from you. I wonder if more of a repeat of the title hook (perhaps as a melodic post hook) could make this one connect more. It's darn close as is, but not quite there.

Quote From Pro: There's hope and confusion in this well-produced and performed track that falls somewhere between '80s throwback pop and modern atmospheric crooners like Troye Sivan.

Roommate by Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee CarpenterSong: RoommateBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)Pro General Comments: This is my favorite one so far – the title is fascinating, I wanted to hear it right away. I really love the vocal, I assume it’s…

Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee Carpenter
Song: Roommate

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)

Pro General Comments: This is my favorite one so far - the title is fascinating, I wanted to hear it right away. I really love the vocal, I assume it's you? If so, you've got a voice that I think will work extraordinarily well for sync. This song is so atmospheric and current sounding that you should submit to as many opportunities as you can on that front. It reminds me both production and vocal-wise of Troye Sivan. It feels very English, which makes it more exotic for us here in America. I don't hear any changes on mix or lead vocal. Songwriting wise, again, I would love to see your lyric, but most came through easily and I found it compelling and imaginative. You really captured the longing and emotion of not wanting to be alone. My favorite so far. Great work, at a competitive writing and production level. Writing songs like this one - with a unique title and very good vocal performance - will get you where you want to go.

Quote From Pro: A beautiful song of hope and longing a la Troye Sivan. Ready for its sync close-up, "Roommate" is delivered by a stellar lead vocal and gorgeous production.

Reading Between The Lines by Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee CarpenterSong: Reading Between The LinesBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)Pro General Comments: I really like this one a lot – it feels like it could be an 80s Erasure/Depeche Mode synth pop track or a modern…

Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee Carpenter
Song: Reading Between The Lines

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)

Pro General Comments: I really like this one a lot - it feels like it could be an 80s Erasure/Depeche Mode synth pop track or a modern song by Ed Sheeran. Once again, I don't like the fade on the track. It's just not as common any more and I think you are selling your hooks short by fading them out. The fade works here better than it does on the other tune, but I still think you should avoid them for pitches right now. This is a very strong vocal performance. A lovely vibrato and a lot of emotion in this take. This is a stronger mix overall, no changes needed. Once again, I like that you establish your hook right at the top. I wouldn't mind a bit more development lyrically in your chorus. I would also love for you to send lyrics along with your submissions so I can dig in a bit more on the tune. Overall, this is great craftmanship. It's not right on the nose for current pop radio, but I do think it's awesome for sync pitches and if you are the artist, ready for release. Moving, interesting and well produced and mixed. Just the right hint of sadness and hope across the board. It's nice to see you can be technical and emotional. That's hard for a lot of songwriters.

Quote From Pro: A lonely song of longing and hope, sung extraordinarily well and mixed ready for a break-up scene in your favorite teen television drama.

Too Far Down the Line – Female by Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee CarpenterSong: Too Far Down the Line – FemaleBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)Pro General Comments: I really enjoyed this listen. I like that you set up the hook right at the top. Your singer sings this one …

Alan Lee Carpenter

Broadjam Artist: Alan Lee Carpenter
Song: Too Far Down the Line - Female

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)

Pro General Comments: I really enjoyed this listen. I like that you set up the hook right at the top. Your singer sings this one like she really means it, and that emotion carries this track very well. If anything it's a little long. The easy way to fix this is to shorten your musical breaks and solo. The lead guitar is way too loud in the mix as well. I would not fade out the way you did, let that chorus ring out a full one more time. Fade isn't happening much anymore on the radio, and this fade feels really forced. I was just rocking out and suddenly it disappeared almost like something was wrong with my speakers. Let it rock! You may want to consider a brokendown chorus to get into the song, and possibly a half chorus, giving you more space to vamp at the end. Nice work overall. I would listen again.

Quote From Pro: Halfway between female empowerment and a moving on song, "Too Far Down the Line" is a great melody and awesome vocal you'll be singing along to before the first chorus is over. It feels both modern and familiar, and would be a great addition to a modern female country record, or a positive television/film scene.

In that moment by Paul Reidy

Broadjam Artist: Paul ReidySong: In that momentBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)Pro General Comments: The emotion behind this song is unfortunately something we may all have to face (if we haven’t already). My concerns with this song…

Paul Reidy

Broadjam Artist: Paul Reidy
Song: In that moment

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)

Pro General Comments: The emotion behind this song is unfortunately something we may all have to face (if we haven't already). My concerns with this song are mostly that it feels outdated - it feels more like the folk artists of the 1960s, or even Carole King from the 1970s, which are a tough sell these days. However, I do really like the emotion in it. The music, however, feels pretty positive against a very sad lyric. The chorus lyric feels well done to me, it's clear and both resigned and sad and hopeful at the same time. I don't know if there's a place for this genre as is right now. It's far from modern pop or country, but could find a home in the indie folk/singer/songwriter/Americana world. If you are an artist yourself, I think this is a good tune to be performing out that will likely get a heartfelt audience response. It's not a song for pitch in commercial music though.

Quote From Pro: A well-written and sentimental look at how quickly life passes.

Broken Flowers by Howard Siden

Broadjam Artist: Howard SidenSong: Broken FlowersBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Jonathan Weiss (Music Supervisor, A&R)Pro General Comments: Howard, I enjoyed listening to this well written and solidly structured instrumental piece that haa an authentic emotion…

Howard Siden

Broadjam Artist: Howard Siden
Song: Broken Flowers

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Jonathan Weiss (Music Supervisor, A&R)

Pro General Comments: Howard, I enjoyed listening to this well written and solidly structured instrumental piece that haa an authentic emotional tone to it's melody, instrumentation and melodic elements. The influence here is reminiscent of something that Santana would've done as an album cut on one of his records in the 80's or 90's, with organ, bass, percussion and drums accompaniment. I thought the structure of the song was well conceived and did a good job of setting up the main melody of the song, verse, chorus and bridge sections, which gave it an appropriate amount of sectional and dynamic contrast. The guitar playing was solid and authentic sounding, nice intonation and a great amount of emotion put forward. While all of those elements were nicely put together structurally and song wise, something to think about in future recordings would be to get the most updated guitar sound down on tape, as well as authentic sounding drums, bass and synth strings. This would give the track more of a contemporary production sound that is more rooted in the 2000's, rather than something that would've been produced in the 80's or 90's. Perhaps this is still in a demo stage, which in fact does a fine job of getting across the emotion of the song, (which is quite strong), but possibly the next time you're going to record, I would suggest you put a greater emphasis on finding the most up to date sample packs for the previously mentioned elements (strings, synth bass, trap drums etc.) to achieve a production level that would be in line with what's being heard on commercial or streaming radio in 2019. Again, this kind of heart wrenching, emotional instrumental power ballad a la Santana I believe still has a place in today's music world, especially when its as well conceived and written as this piece is. However, putting together all of the appropriate contemporary production elements are also an important piece of putting together a package which can be marketed to today's commercial market.

Quote From Pro: Emotional and heartfelt instrumental power ballad that features a lead melody from a solidly played electric guitar that is ultimately reminiscent of some of Santana's instrumental pieces that he became famous for throughout the last four decades.

Whiskey In my coffee by Paul Reidy

Broadjam Artist: Paul ReidySong: Whiskey In my coffeeBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)Pro General Comments: This has a retro rock feel to it much like the female rock artists of the eighties and nineties Ala Pat Benatar …

Paul Reidy

Broadjam Artist: Paul Reidy
Song: Whiskey In my coffee

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)

Pro General Comments: This has a retro rock feel to it much like the female rock artists of the eighties and nineties Ala Pat Benatar and Lita Ford to name a couple. The form/structure is more alternative than commercial rock. The meter and phrasing of the three verses are different which affects the melody and might make it harder for your listener to remember the words and melody. I like 6 line verses. They are easy to rhyme and when they follow an AABCCB rhyme pattern they can be very catchy and memorable.Ice/Night/Black/Band/Hand/Land is AABCCC which is a close match. if you would have rhymed Black in line 6 it would be a perfect match.The second verse uses an AABBCC rhyme scheme which is very different than verse 1.Verse three has 8 lines and that affects the melody and phrasing which isn't something i would advise making a habit of. Symmetry is important if you are wanting to write commercial catchy memorable songs regardless of the genre. Verses should all have similar rhyme patterns, meter, phrasing and melody. There's an infusion of country lyrics in this rock arrangement as well. Whiskey in my coffee is a common country theme. The verses are all unpredictable which isn't a bad thing but i want you to keep in mind that it's important your listener can follow the lyric and music without being distracted by changes in rhyme, meter, phrasing and melody. The melodic hook you start the chorus with is good...it's rock and it's familiar...easy to remember and sing. The chorus starts strong then it wanders a little because of it's length. I'd prefer a shorter chorus and I'd prefer you end with the hook same as you started with the hook...means everything to me is not the hook...it's not memorable and lacks the impact of whiskey in my coffee in my opinion. Coffee is an E rhyme which you've supported so it should be easy to plug the hook into the last line.Here's an option to try. He's 100 proof pure caffeine he's the whiskey in my coffee. Just a suggestion. Songs about being in a band or being a singer are usually written by a singer who is in a band. This type of song is hard to pitch to singer/songwriters. The arrangement is close to four minutes which isn't bad. The bridge is an option which could also be used as a tag in the last chorus...The double tracking of the female vocal gave it an edge but it was a little pitchy on the higher notes. I like the energy of the groove.

Quote From Pro: Paul Reidy has a fun and positive spirit that is easy to feel in his music and lyric. He mixes retro rock with country rock which is appealing to all age groups.

Hooten’s Holler by Hank Thomas

Broadjam Artist: Hank ThomasSong: Hooten’s HollerBroadjam Pro Reviewer: Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)Pro General Comments: This song is a very enjoyable, fun and uplifting listen. My main reason for some lower rankings (the 3s out of 5) is because it’s…

Hank Thomas

Broadjam Artist: Hank Thomas
Song: Hooten's Holler

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Elizabeth Elkins (Songwriter)

Pro General Comments: This song is a very enjoyable, fun and uplifting listen. My main reason for some lower rankings (the 3s out of 5) is because it's outdated for current country music, and that may make it difficult if you want to pitch it or are looking for an artist deal. It sounds like a great song from the late 90s/early 2000s that a band like Shenandoah or Little Texas would do a great job with. I also think that the chorus could lift a little more. The melody in the chorus is very repetitive and it never takes us to the fun place a listener needs in a song like this one. I think it's just the top of the chorus that needs a kick to take us up there. The harmonies sound absolutely great by the way - solid, well done country singing. Overall, I feel like the mix is a little lackluster, across the board the sound is staying in one place and is lacking the dynamic to make it soar. I think it's in the mix and arrangement (and maybe that missing chorus lift) because the instruments are played very well and the lead vocal is a stellar performance as well. That leads me to believe it's the song itself missing the "X" factor to make it great. As is, it's good - but I have a feeling based on your stuff you can knock a homerun.

Quote From Pro: A get-down, super fun song that harkens back to the best of Shenandoah. Hank brings the party!