TO BE A MAN by allison bolton

allison bolton

Broadjam Artist: allison bolton
Song: TO BE A MAN

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)

Pro General Comments: This song reminds me of retro Americana folk from the 60's. The steel guitar is country but a harmonica could easily replace the steel guitar. The form structure is very Americana folk in my opinion. Verse/verse/chorus/verse/chorus/bridge/chorus/instrumental outro is not contemporary country radio friendly. The song is well over four minutes long which pretty much makes it destined to be an album cut. As a rule of thumb the closer you are to three minutes your chances of radio airplay go up and the closer you are to four minutes those chances go down. This song is closer to five minutes than four minutes. The third verse is a mixture of verse one and verse two and it doesn't add anything new to the story line. My advice is do not have a third verse or re-write the third verse and add new info, action and imagery. If you delete verse three the form would be verse/chorus/verse/chorus/bridge/chorus and you would be closer to four minutes long than five minutes long. Starting a song with two long verses goes against most commercial guidelines but it is acceptable in Americana folk. Ending the second verse with the hook is also indicative of Americana folk. The song ends but I'm not convinced the singer ever learned how to be a man. The song doesn't point out what makes a man a man in his eyes. I really like the retro feel of this song. My guess is that baby boomers will also like this style of Americana folk rock. Strong melodies, catchy and memorable. I love the instrumental track and your vocal. The song sounds authentic. If you are hoping to pitch this to other artists keep in mind that the majority of Alternative Americana folk artists write their own songs and very few ever record outside material that they didn't have a hand in writing.

Quote From Pro: Allison Bolton brings the authentic sound of retro 60's Americana folk rock in the styles of Arlo Guthrie and Bob Dylan to the present day. Baby boomers as well as all fans of Americana will enjoy Allison Bolton's music.

TO BE A MAN by allison bolton

allison bolton

Broadjam Artist: allison bolton
Song: TO BE A MAN

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)

Pro General Comments: This song reminds me of retro Americana folk from the 60's. The steel guitar is country but a harmonica could easily replace the steel guitar. The form structure is very Americana folk in my opinion. Verse/verse/chorus/verse/chorus/bridge/chorus/instrumental outro is not contemporary country radio friendly. The song is well over four minutes long which pretty much makes it destined to be an album cut. As a rule of thumb the closer you are to three minutes your chances of radio airplay go up and the closer you are to four minutes those chances go down. This song is closer to five minutes than four minutes. The third verse is a mixture of verse one and verse two and it doesn't add anything new to the story line. My advice is do not have a third verse or re-write the third verse and add new info, action and imagery. If you delete verse three the form would be verse/chorus/verse/chorus/bridge/chorus and you would be closer to four minutes long than five minutes long. Starting a song with two long verses goes against most commercial guidelines but it is acceptable in Americana folk. Ending the second verse with the hook is also indicative of Americana folk. The song ends but I'm not convinced the singer ever learned how to be a man. The song doesn't point out what makes a man a man in his eyes. I really like the retro feel of this song. My guess is that baby boomers will also like this style of Americana folk rock. Strong melodies, catchy and memorable. I love the instrumental track and your vocal. The song sounds authentic. If you are hoping to pitch this to other artists keep in mind that the majority of Alternative Americana folk artists write their own songs and very few ever record outside material that they didn't have a hand in writing.

Quote From Pro: Allison Bolton brings the authentic sound of retro 60's Americana folk rock in the styles of Arlo Guthrie and Bob Dylan to the present day. Baby boomers as well as all fans of Americana will enjoy Allison Bolton's music.

Teardrop in the Rain (vocals) by Mary P. Carter

Mary P. Carter

Broadjam Artist: Mary P. Carter
Song: Teardrop in the Rain (vocals)

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)

Pro General Comments: very dark and melancholic. sad and lonely singer prays for rain so her lover won't see her cry in the rain.good prosody. the song is slow but your melody kept me interested.the chorus rhyme could be stronger...i would not use A rhymes especially after ending the verse with A rhymes.this song might find a home in a music placement company or music library for movies and television...this will work for the UK and Ireland as well as Appalachian country in the USA. speed it up a few more bpm's .I like the unpredictable phrasing and chord progression...very emotional and moving...The piano sounds great and adds a lot to the arrangement but be careful in making it too busy...in this genre simplicity is a major factor. You want the listener to focus on the words and melody not on the piano accompaniment.

Quote From Pro: Mary Carter has the talent and skill to write a unique blend of Americana folk with Celtic influences. She can take a song of heartbreak and sorrow and make it interesting touching and emotional and show a ray of sunshine that offers hope. She is not jaded by commercialism and cookie cutter formula songs. Her music is real and the listener will be moved by its innocence and honesty.

Teardrop in the Rain (vocals) by Mary P. Carter

Mary P. Carter

Broadjam Artist: Mary P. Carter
Song: Teardrop in the Rain (vocals)

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)

Pro General Comments: very dark and melancholic. sad and lonely singer prays for rain so her lover won't see her cry in the rain.good prosody. the song is slow but your melody kept me interested.the chorus rhyme could be stronger...i would not use A rhymes especially after ending the verse with A rhymes.this song might find a home in a music placement company or music library for movies and television...this will work for the UK and Ireland as well as Appalachian country in the USA. speed it up a few more bpm's .I like the unpredictable phrasing and chord progression...very emotional and moving...The piano sounds great and adds a lot to the arrangement but be careful in making it too busy...in this genre simplicity is a major factor. You want the listener to focus on the words and melody not on the piano accompaniment.

Quote From Pro: Mary Carter has the talent and skill to write a unique blend of Americana folk with Celtic influences. She can take a song of heartbreak and sorrow and make it interesting touching and emotional and show a ray of sunshine that offers hope. She is not jaded by commercialism and cookie cutter formula songs. Her music is real and the listener will be moved by its innocence and honesty.

This Means War by Mary Jennings

Mary Jennings

Broadjam Artist: Mary Jennings
Song: This Means War

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Jonathan Weiss (Music Supervisor, A&R)

Pro General Comments: Chorus is recognizable and overall has noticeable sectional contrast between verse and chorus sections. Verse and chorus melody are pretty similar in tone in terms of being in the same dynamic range and melodic structure. Chorus is pretty strident sounding in terms of the lyrics themselves (this means war) and the delivery which is somewhat aggressive in tonality. Pretty innovative background vocal arrangement which has the ability to soften up the more aggressively styled lead vocal phrasing and overall tone. Instrumental track and overall production is contemporary sounding and has current sounding percussion, bass and keyboard samples being used. Bridge section also helps to break up the verse and chorus sections. Vocal rhythm during verses is pretty staccato sounding which also moves it towards a more aggressive and familiar sounding style.

Quote From Pro: Contemporary sounding arrangement and confident sounding vocal delivery make this song an appealing relationship based song that has an overall current sound.

This Means War by Mary Jennings

Mary Jennings

Broadjam Artist: Mary Jennings
Song: This Means War

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Jonathan Weiss (Music Supervisor, A&R)

Pro General Comments: Chorus is recognizable and overall has noticeable sectional contrast between verse and chorus sections. Verse and chorus melody are pretty similar in tone in terms of being in the same dynamic range and melodic structure. Chorus is pretty strident sounding in terms of the lyrics themselves (this means war) and the delivery which is somewhat aggressive in tonality. Pretty innovative background vocal arrangement which has the ability to soften up the more aggressively styled lead vocal phrasing and overall tone. Instrumental track and overall production is contemporary sounding and has current sounding percussion, bass and keyboard samples being used. Bridge section also helps to break up the verse and chorus sections. Vocal rhythm during verses is pretty staccato sounding which also moves it towards a more aggressive and familiar sounding style.

Quote From Pro: Contemporary sounding arrangement and confident sounding vocal delivery make this song an appealing relationship based song that has an overall current sound.

Disconnected (II) by Mary P. Carter

Mary P. Carter

Broadjam Artist: Mary P. Carter
Song: Disconnected (II)

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Malik Williams (Producer, Artist, Engineer, Composer)

Pro General Comments: Hi Mary!Thanks so much for the opportunity to review your work! First off I'll say.. Nice song! It was a bit of a throwback for me... and that's a good thing. I chose Pop as a gene/category (because there's only one choice, but I can hear that classic R&B soul influence in your voice as well. Your soft, but confident delivery and tone resembles that of the classic Epic Records singer, Lulu! I was immediately reminded of her performance of the classic song, To Sir With Love. I also hear a hint of Mary Wilson of that same era.The lyrics are pretty straight forward and your melodic progressions blend well with the arrangement, that is well done.My constructive comments are Overall, I feel this song could use some additional instrumentation and production, although, the recording of the instruments, vocal sound, and mix is clean. The acoustic drums and timing is tight, but I kept wanting to hear the bass line move more in the pocket to drive the track and groove more. Even having the natural bass sound sustain as it would between notes with natural fingering techniques. That would give this track more of an R&B groove. I'd say, the same goes for the piano performance. Just for fun, you could add some guitar wah-wah to really funk it up! It would add a little more coloration to the mid-range of this song to better bridge your vocals with the lower frequencies in the mix.Again, I'm just lending some production ideas to consider, be it this one or a future project.Nevertheless, the title and chorus of this song gets the message across. That is extremely important if you're considering any film and tv placements. I hope these comments and constructive advice is helpful... Keep writing, and good luck with this song! All the best!!

Quote From Pro: Mary P. Carter's voice is pure and authentic. Her soft delivery and tone resembles that of the classic Epic Records singer, Lulu!

Who’s Gonna Turn On A Light (Selsky/Dunkle) by Randal Dunkle

Randal Dunkle

Broadjam Artist: Randal Dunkle
Song: Who's Gonna Turn On A Light (Selsky/Dunkle)

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Tirk Wilder (Songwriter, Performer)

Pro General Comments: Randal,First of all I have to say that reviewing any song that has Jesus uplifted in it is very hard for me. How can I say anything negative about it? It is in service to my Lord and Savior. THAT fact alone makes it a worthy effort.I don't often get songs that rock this HARD, either. Shame hardly anybody sends me this genre.My only suggestions would be for you to consider these thoughts:In the chorus, When you come to the words "about Christ", the melody goes down. The words also have the same meter as every other word in the line.I would have those words go WAY HIGHER than anything else in the line, and I would stretch them out almost to half note size. They need to be EMPHASIZED. HE is the reason for the song, and I believe His Name should BLATANTLY stand out somehow.I would also say that I am not crazy about the lyric in the second verse AFTER the phrase "Lord, we love you day and night". I believe you can do a little better than what you have following that phrase.The reason I say that is that your rhyme pattern in the first verse, "lights" rhymes with "tonight". In the second verse, "night" does not rhyme with "back", and your rhyme pattern is broken. The second line "but help us not to simply set aside what's going on outside" seems a little weak to me. From everything else I see here, I can see that YOU can do better than that.The only other thing I might mention is that the effects you have on the lead vocal might be a tad heavy. The reason I say that is that the lyrics were a bit difficult to understand with that much reverb and delay on them.Hey, this song is about HIM. Let's make sure that even the casual listener gets that, right?Rock on, buddy. TESTIFY!

Quote From Pro: This artist could rock the Christian world!