SEX MAGNET by Jay Lindsey Graham

Jay Lindsey Graham

Broadjam Artist: Jay Lindsey Graham
Song: SEX MAGNET

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Diana Williamson (Songwriter, Music Supervisor)

Pro General Comments: Please note I don't rate individual instrumentation since my expertise lies more in marketability, lyric, melody, and overall performance.You have some interesting arrangement ideas going on here. The song has a good peppy feel going for it. The female vocal has a nice sense of angst and urgency. You may want to enhance it with some cool bg's/harmonies.The beat rocks. You seem to have a good melodic and arrangement sense- your tune develops and doesn't get stale which is often the case in dance.The rhythmic breakdown works nicely before the hook kicks in.Your title is intriguing enough. You might want to milk it a bit more. Carly Simon singing "you walked into the party- like you were walking onto a yacht"- will be forever ingrained in pop music history- talking about a vain lover in Your So Vain. Those kind of details -visual details engage your listener.You may want to play around a bit more with the idea of the man drawing her in- if the song is called Sex Magnet. It's there in her vocal desperation which is nice but could be developed a little with perhaps "why" he is coming after her. What is so sexy about him? Add some new rhymes- the more -the merrier. "I'm the queen of pain- (don't want to go down that road again")?... Give us a bit more description - it's interesting but it would be better with a few more details.It would be good to have a turnaround at the end- of your story- such as she gives in at the end- or something new happens.Nice instrumental -with the Spanish style vibe- keeps it interesting, I might even add more throughout 'cause it works nicely. Not many songs in dance that I hear - have that kinda feel going on- milk it. Use your strengths.

Quote From Pro: Writer has a good melodic and arrangement sense on this fun ditty- Sex Magnet.

SEX MAGNET by Jay Lindsey Graham

Jay Lindsey Graham

Broadjam Artist: Jay Lindsey Graham
Song: SEX MAGNET

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Diana Williamson (Songwriter, Music Supervisor)

Pro General Comments: Please note I don't rate individual instrumentation since my expertise lies more in marketability, lyric, melody, and overall performance.You have some interesting arrangement ideas going on here. The song has a good peppy feel going for it. The female vocal has a nice sense of angst and urgency. You may want to enhance it with some cool bg's/harmonies.The beat rocks. You seem to have a good melodic and arrangement sense- your tune develops and doesn't get stale which is often the case in dance.The rhythmic breakdown works nicely before the hook kicks in.Your title is intriguing enough. You might want to milk it a bit more. Carly Simon singing "you walked into the party- like you were walking onto a yacht"- will be forever ingrained in pop music history- talking about a vain lover in Your So Vain. Those kind of details -visual details engage your listener.You may want to play around a bit more with the idea of the man drawing her in- if the song is called Sex Magnet. It's there in her vocal desperation which is nice but could be developed a little with perhaps "why" he is coming after her. What is so sexy about him? Add some new rhymes- the more -the merrier. "I'm the queen of pain- (don't want to go down that road again")?... Give us a bit more description - it's interesting but it would be better with a few more details.It would be good to have a turnaround at the end- of your story- such as she gives in at the end- or something new happens.Nice instrumental -with the Spanish style vibe- keeps it interesting, I might even add more throughout 'cause it works nicely. Not many songs in dance that I hear - have that kinda feel going on- milk it. Use your strengths.

Quote From Pro: Writer has a good melodic and arrangement sense on this fun ditty- Sex Magnet.

Waiting for you by Jay Lindsey Graham

Jay Lindsey Graham

Broadjam Artist: Jay Lindsey Graham
Song: Waiting for you

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Diana Williamson (Songwriter, Music Supervisor)

Pro General Comments: Please note I don't rate individual instrumentation since my expertise lies more in marketability, lyric, melody, and overall performance.Overall I like your vibe- the jangly instrumentation, it is a very happy song and pleasant on the ears. The concept is a good one. And it's nice that's it's a bit more unusual for the man to tackle this angle and concept. In the past -it's always been the female (girl group types) "waiting by the phone"- it's a new era- and it's nice to hear it from the man's perspective. Your melodic hook/chorus comes in nicely. The bridge works too to give us a little change.First instinct is- that it could stand a tad more development. There is a bit of repetition going on here- in the lyric which could easily be tweaked a bit. Before you shop it- I would try and find a new rhyme perhaps for your hook- something that rhymes with the waiting line. We don't need to hear that over and over.To make it a bit more interesting- you might want to give us an idea of your ideal girl- or what you imagine her to be like. A few more details would make the story more interesting. Maybe for eg- you realize at the end she was someone right in front of you- these types of ideas make things more memorable.You had the line "Step into My Life"- right then and there I thought- now that is a "fresh" hook line. If that had been your title- that would have been a killer hook line- because it's a more visual hook. Waiting for You can work- but it pays to always search for a title that makes people stop for a minute and is a little out of the ordinary.I don't know how much you want to change the song- for eg- "Step into my Life" could be a bg vocal line if you wanted to keep your original hook. I would mess around with it a little.

Quote From Pro: Artist has a pleasant happy vibe - the jangly arrangement has a very good feel to it.

Waiting for you by Jay Lindsey Graham

Jay Lindsey Graham

Broadjam Artist: Jay Lindsey Graham
Song: Waiting for you

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Diana Williamson (Songwriter, Music Supervisor)

Pro General Comments: Please note I don't rate individual instrumentation since my expertise lies more in marketability, lyric, melody, and overall performance.Overall I like your vibe- the jangly instrumentation, it is a very happy song and pleasant on the ears. The concept is a good one. And it's nice that's it's a bit more unusual for the man to tackle this angle and concept. In the past -it's always been the female (girl group types) "waiting by the phone"- it's a new era- and it's nice to hear it from the man's perspective. Your melodic hook/chorus comes in nicely. The bridge works too to give us a little change.First instinct is- that it could stand a tad more development. There is a bit of repetition going on here- in the lyric which could easily be tweaked a bit. Before you shop it- I would try and find a new rhyme perhaps for your hook- something that rhymes with the waiting line. We don't need to hear that over and over.To make it a bit more interesting- you might want to give us an idea of your ideal girl- or what you imagine her to be like. A few more details would make the story more interesting. Maybe for eg- you realize at the end she was someone right in front of you- these types of ideas make things more memorable.You had the line "Step into My Life"- right then and there I thought- now that is a "fresh" hook line. If that had been your title- that would have been a killer hook line- because it's a more visual hook. Waiting for You can work- but it pays to always search for a title that makes people stop for a minute and is a little out of the ordinary.I don't know how much you want to change the song- for eg- "Step into my Life" could be a bg vocal line if you wanted to keep your original hook. I would mess around with it a little.

Quote From Pro: Artist has a pleasant happy vibe - the jangly arrangement has a very good feel to it.

Not Easy by Mary Segato

Mary Segato

Broadjam Artist: Mary Segato
Song: Not Easy

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Jack Williams (Songwriter)

Pro General Comments: Hey Mary.First things first,,I have to apologize to you for taking so long getting to your song and listening to it!! I'm really sorry!!I wanted to be a pro-reviewer and I was honestly truly looking forward to doing it and I have been just sitting around waiting to see if someone was going to send me anything of theirs to review and nothing was coming in so I was beginning to think that it wasn't for me till Mike got in touch with me and said that I had two reviews waiting for me and it was all because I didn't know where to look and somehow if I did get some kind of notification I must've missed it because I'm so new to "Broadjam"SO anyway I'm here now and........Wow girl! What a cool little song you've got there! I don't think that you'll have any problems at all getting someone to pick this up for a sync license for a film or TV it's sure has all the right elements in it, just be patient and believe me that's the hardest part sitting around waiting and taking all the passes and hearing all the "No's", "Not right for this project", etcetcetc but this is a quality piece of songwriting and good songs get heard.So yes I do think it's suitable for licensing and pitching to anything you want to pitch it to. Where do you live? Do you live in a music city like Nashville, L.A., Austin, Detroit, New York, Memphis, Dallas or Chicago? If so then I'm sure you already have some pretty good connections and relationships developed along the way who will be happy to toss you songs around to various situations especially if they are as good as this one is! If you DON'T live near any of these places and you DON'T have any other connections or relationships built up besides "Broadjam" then just keep them coming and I'm sure something will fall out of the sky for you because when your stuff is this good something usually always happens as long as it gets heard by someone in the power seat so to speak :)DID you submit it to that "Women of Substance" thing that was going around when it came around,,I know another "Broadjam" affiliate who did and they picked up one of her songs recently to play on it and this is definitely worthy of them taking a listen, so if you haven't and it's still open you should give it a shot too.There's not much I can add to this because it's pretty obvious to me that you know your tradecraft when it comes to putting a song together and the rest is all the ouck of the draw and the stars lining up for you and coming up with a hook and an idea for a song that no one has ever heard before and then saying it in a way that no one has ever hear it said before and if you keep striving to do that and you want it bad enough success will come hunt you down and give you that prize that like the rest of us inside your heart of dreams you want very bad! If you continue writing song's this good and better trust me that single star of light will shine on you when you least expect it to!Good luck Mary and thanks for letting me review your song it was a pleasure!

Quote From Pro: "If you continue writing song's this good and better trust me that single star of light will shine on you when you least expect it to!"

Not Easy by Mary Segato

Mary Segato

Broadjam Artist: Mary Segato
Song: Not Easy

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Jack Williams (Songwriter)

Pro General Comments: Hey Mary.First things first,,I have to apologize to you for taking so long getting to your song and listening to it!! I'm really sorry!!I wanted to be a pro-reviewer and I was honestly truly looking forward to doing it and I have been just sitting around waiting to see if someone was going to send me anything of theirs to review and nothing was coming in so I was beginning to think that it wasn't for me till Mike got in touch with me and said that I had two reviews waiting for me and it was all because I didn't know where to look and somehow if I did get some kind of notification I must've missed it because I'm so new to "Broadjam"SO anyway I'm here now and........Wow girl! What a cool little song you've got there! I don't think that you'll have any problems at all getting someone to pick this up for a sync license for a film or TV it's sure has all the right elements in it, just be patient and believe me that's the hardest part sitting around waiting and taking all the passes and hearing all the "No's", "Not right for this project", etcetcetc but this is a quality piece of songwriting and good songs get heard.So yes I do think it's suitable for licensing and pitching to anything you want to pitch it to. Where do you live? Do you live in a music city like Nashville, L.A., Austin, Detroit, New York, Memphis, Dallas or Chicago? If so then I'm sure you already have some pretty good connections and relationships developed along the way who will be happy to toss you songs around to various situations especially if they are as good as this one is! If you DON'T live near any of these places and you DON'T have any other connections or relationships built up besides "Broadjam" then just keep them coming and I'm sure something will fall out of the sky for you because when your stuff is this good something usually always happens as long as it gets heard by someone in the power seat so to speak :)DID you submit it to that "Women of Substance" thing that was going around when it came around,,I know another "Broadjam" affiliate who did and they picked up one of her songs recently to play on it and this is definitely worthy of them taking a listen, so if you haven't and it's still open you should give it a shot too.There's not much I can add to this because it's pretty obvious to me that you know your tradecraft when it comes to putting a song together and the rest is all the ouck of the draw and the stars lining up for you and coming up with a hook and an idea for a song that no one has ever heard before and then saying it in a way that no one has ever hear it said before and if you keep striving to do that and you want it bad enough success will come hunt you down and give you that prize that like the rest of us inside your heart of dreams you want very bad! If you continue writing song's this good and better trust me that single star of light will shine on you when you least expect it to!Good luck Mary and thanks for letting me review your song it was a pleasure!

Quote From Pro: "If you continue writing song's this good and better trust me that single star of light will shine on you when you least expect it to!"

Wishing on a Snowflake by LaLa Deaton

LaLa Deaton

Broadjam Artist: LaLa Deaton
Song: Wishing on a Snowflake

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Alex Johnston (Music Supervisor, Composer, Producer)

Pro General Comments: Of the hardest things to write is a Christmas themed song that isnt so stupidly obvious that is cheesy or bad or too different that it doesn't evoke that emotional feeling and set off all the mental images that make a great Christmas song.This however is perfect. Jazz classy, lullabye soft, Love song based and giving me images of those great 40's songs with the 5 part harmony chorus and then a great turn in to full band middle section, just to add that cherry of quality. The lyrics are fantastic, great use of phrase and perfect harmonies that give you the warm feeling of safety for some reason.I'm not one these Producers who gives negative feedback because I think I would do it better, nor will I blow smoke up backs sides with false love. Its that good that I don't have any critique to give it. You should be super proud of the track and so should everybody involved I will put this track in my company files for any placement opps I have and see what I can do.Great Work!

Quote From Pro: On of the most innovative Christmas songs you will hear. Classy, heartwarming, but beautifully upbeat and the elegant vocal delivery is the embodiment of safe, sweet family values of the American 1940's.I love it. Top, Top song

Wishing on a Snowflake by LaLa Deaton

LaLa Deaton

Broadjam Artist: LaLa Deaton
Song: Wishing on a Snowflake

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Alex Johnston (Music Supervisor, Composer, Producer)

Pro General Comments: Of the hardest things to write is a Christmas themed song that isnt so stupidly obvious that is cheesy or bad or too different that it doesn't evoke that emotional feeling and set off all the mental images that make a great Christmas song.This however is perfect. Jazz classy, lullabye soft, Love song based and giving me images of those great 40's songs with the 5 part harmony chorus and then a great turn in to full band middle section, just to add that cherry of quality. The lyrics are fantastic, great use of phrase and perfect harmonies that give you the warm feeling of safety for some reason.I'm not one these Producers who gives negative feedback because I think I would do it better, nor will I blow smoke up backs sides with false love. Its that good that I don't have any critique to give it. You should be super proud of the track and so should everybody involved I will put this track in my company files for any placement opps I have and see what I can do.Great Work!

Quote From Pro: On of the most innovative Christmas songs you will hear. Classy, heartwarming, but beautifully upbeat and the elegant vocal delivery is the embodiment of safe, sweet family values of the American 1940's.I love it. Top, Top song