Because of you (home recording) by MoBack

MoBack

Broadjam Artist: MoBack
Song: Because of you (home recording)

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
David Weiss (Music Supervisor)

Pro General Comments: Hi, thanks for your submission! I know the craft of songwriting is important to you. I heard a lot to like, as well as many things to improve (mostly production-wise), in "Because of You." I really appreciate the positive sentiment in the song, and the unbridled joy it projects. The chorus represents such an upbeat embrace for the listener to dig into - it feels like permission to just go ahead and love someone as much as you want, with no boundaries. The world needs more songs like that!Your voice communicates the message very authentically, which only adds to the power of the lyrics throughout the song. Yes, the demo sound of it is definitely there! Thanks for letting me know that. I was honest in my downgrades on the instrumentation, just so you know what I think needs improving. But I understand it's only a demo, not meant for Prime Time. Did you do all the programming and instrumentation yourself? If so, that's pretty impressive -- feven though I believe there's room for improvement, that's a tough feat to pull off and adds to what you can potentially accomplish as a songwriter. There are also four seconds of silence to start the recording, make sure that gets shaved off.If you wind up keeping the song for yourself, I would recommend re-recording "Because of You" with a full band to let its natural exuberance come shining through! Do you know what artist you have in mind for this song? I'm curious if you've got a particular singer/artist that you think would be ideal to pick up on this.

Quote From Pro: An unabashed tribute to the pure joy of love!

You Are by Doug Mayberry

Doug Mayberry

Broadjam Artist: Doug Mayberry
Song: You Are

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Doug Diamond (Music Supervisor, Engineer, Producer, Composer )

Pro General Comments: Hi Doug -Thank you for letting me know about your song "You Are". I really like it. You've captured a God-given emotional connection that a husband should hopefully have for his wife, and stated it in a way that many men would be able to relate to (I know I do) - and appreciate the true gift a Godly wife really is. Lyrically, you've done an excellent job at making it personal to your own bride, yet universal enough that any husband (especially a Christian husband) should identify with the emotional value put forth in the song, so nice job there.I'd consider this song Country-Rock by the way. The Country genre will be more open to God-based lyrics... Rock... not so much.As a music supervisor, one of the first things I listen for is the main melody or hook in the chorus (because that's generally what most people identify with first) - and you've written a very memorable one from the standpoint of still being able to remember it after the song is over. It's kind of easy-going and smooth with a nice touch, melodically.On the title, I feel that "You Are" is good, but if it were me, in order to give it a little more description and uniqueness, I'd probably call it "You Are (So Precious To Me)" - so there is absolutely no doubt what the song is about. Just an idea... take it or leave it.From a production value standpoint (the technical aspect of the recording itself), I would say it's pretty close. The mix is solid. You can hear everything in its place very well in the stereo field. It's clean sounding and seems like overall it's well done professional.On the performances, the guitar at the beginning (about 7-seconds in) feels a little loose or sloppy and offbeat just for a second or two, but then it locks into the groove just fine after that. Can you move that around in your editor and fix it? I could do that for you if you have the individual tracks. The drums and keyboards are good. The bass is too. The BGVs are good as-is - especially the female vocals. The lead vocal is ok, but to me, isn't *quite* as strong as it could be. It's not bad... not at all. It's just that it could be *better*. To me, it's good, but it's not quite Great yet. See the difference? But I do understand that primarily it's a vehicle to deliver your wonderful message to your own bride, so I get it. I'm not being critical of you, I'm just telling you what I hear and putting myself in the shoes of some of my sync licensing clients (knowing what they look for and like). Likely they would want to hear a completely different singer to give them options. Still, what you have is good and I don't want you to think otherwise. But I always tell people to "remember your competition" because it's fierce out there as far as getting placements goes.I do think this song could work in the right sync context for sure - especially a wedding video. Have you tried contacting some wedding video production houses and playing the song for them? You might find some of them could be interested in licensing usage of the song and recording for some of their wedding video productions. Just an idea. You could work out a blanket licensing deal with numerous wedding video producers, and perhaps have a nice annual check to cash. I'd probably have a simple license on-hand before you approach any of them in case they say 'yes' right away (then, you're ready). Make it simple if you choose to go that route - like an annual fee / then they can use it in any productions they create for that year.That's pretty much everything I wanted to let you know about. I hope that was helpful. Feel free to stay in touch with me via my main site if you like. Thanks again and take care.Best,Doug DiamondDiamondigital Media / Diamondisc Audio

Quote From Pro: Doug Mayberry's song "You Are" is a great testimonial to the loving relationship between a man and his wife in a Christ-centered marriage. This song could easily work in appropriate wedding videos or other music placement type scenarios that evoke similar, needed lyrical content to match picture. It's the type of song that should make a Christian wife feel loved and adored by her husband.

Don’t Shoot by Sistah Fiyah

Sistah Fiyah

Broadjam Artist: Sistah Fiyah
Song: Don't Shoot

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Cortez Farris (Producer and Engineer)

Pro General Comments: These are some great lyrics!The melodies of the vocals are good.The overall recording is ok the mix could have a litte more excitment!things like some effects on the vocals like reverb, delays, or maybe even a little Autotune..

Quote From Pro: This song needs to be on TV or in a movie ASAP!

Yesterday (Featuring Bryan Harkness) by Tim Sharp

Tim Sharp

Broadjam Artist: Tim Sharp
Song: Yesterday (Featuring Bryan Harkness)

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Nikki Hornsby (Songwriter, Artist, Producer, Arranger)

Pro General Comments: If there were ever a song writer submission to Broadjam that I would stop my tasks in the office to listen it is your song. Your production work is prime as I listen focused on hearing precisely good work like I do too when judging the Grammy's every year. I am impressed. Again I must say Bravo! This is a follow up release and not the one that would grab attentions. I gave you a suggested title too because the titles are never copyrightable you know and do a search engine on songs with that single word title. In picking titles you might have consumer searchers crossing over for another download from someone who thinks it's your song and it's an old or another one unrelated to yours. The title search helps but World of Yesterday maybe also used before but research is warranted if you'd want.

Quote From Pro: Grateful I am for that truth in the professional music recording industry. I learned to judge talent for many years taught by a great gentleman named Cliffie Stone and he was impressive to me. So I continued with the honor of judging the Grammy submissions to the Top Five where my vote is my responsibility like all the others honored to judge. Here I am reviewing another great song among so many that you have produced in the past. I am honored to listen. Focusing on finding faults I found not one but I'm not the know it all of perfection. Oh, if anyone says they are run for the hills! I understand that my Grandpa was an A&R man for Columbia Records before I was born and discovered lots of outstanding talents in his day like Bessie Smith who Billy Holiday was listening to at that time. He was very famous in his day as a singer songwriter & musician too in the music recording industry and I've still got a long way to go. I DO promise you that I've heard and I'm still learning all the world of change in music worldwide. Tim, YOUR work is good and of course it's the consumer that needs to buy it for that exact reason if that's your goal. So take your writers hats off and put on the business of product marketing and sales to reach the fans of country music like you have written so honestly. I am a fan and appreciate your asking me where to possibly go and what to do to promote yourselves. It's like any consumers product - it takes time and money - or if you want it from corporations that could tie your work into theirs machine ... from film to internet and more it's money profit & loss base. Possibilities in business are endless and the only thing you need to have is to know you are good at your craft and you have created great intellectual property and for this, Tim, you should be proud as I am to have you reach out to me once more. God bless and I am here when you get to the Grammy Level for your submission as I will hear it before your name appears on the top five in that category for this I am certain. Sincerely with respect, Nikki

Broken Flowers by Howard Siden

Howard Siden

Broadjam Artist: Howard Siden
Song: Broken Flowers

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Diana Williamson (Songwriter, Music Supervisor)

Pro General Comments: As you probably know- I don't comment on instrumentation as my expertise lies in overall vision, marketability, lyrics, hooks, etc..Well you have managed to avoid the songwriter's sin. This song is not boring. It has energy, panache and moves like a hungry beast. Awesome work. It has a good structure which works and keeps the ear wanting more and doesn't ramble.Many instrumentals get stuck somewhere but your song really moves. It's hard to find fault with this song to tell you the truth which is why I'm saying what its not!Its got that elusive, bluesy, sexy, haunting, hypnotic feel that you can hear in Beck, Clapton and many others.The title is descriptive which you want in an instrumental. You want to invoke the imagination which this does. It makes you wonder and is what will tempt a music supervisor to take a listen. You don't want "track 12 intense" which they will have a million of, you want a "Broken Flowers" which stokes the curiosity and describes the mood.I could hear this as a movie/TV soundtrack to many uplifting type scenes where at long last the lovers are finally reunited type-of-thing. It's been a long haul but there is relief and pathos at the end. It could fit in a lot of eras, the 80's and in some TV shows now as well. Keep your eyes and ears open for shows that use this type of material and pitch them.Not sure if I could hear a vocal on this song- I always try to imagine out of the box things for each song I listen to. It really shines on its own, but it has such a great vibe, I can't help but thinking it might be fun to mess around with a vocalist on it. Like Gary Moore's hit "Still Got the Blues" which I believe became one of his biggest hits. It would all depend on finding the right vocalist, the right tone to not overpower the song.Really great work and a talent like yours, better keep on keeping on.

Quote From Pro: This bluesy hypnotic track really shines and would work well in a soundtrack that wants a Beck, Clapton, Gary Moore type vibe.

TO BE A MAN by allison bolton

allison bolton

Broadjam Artist: allison bolton
Song: TO BE A MAN

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)

Pro General Comments: This song reminds me of retro Americana folk from the 60's. The steel guitar is country but a harmonica could easily replace the steel guitar. The form structure is very Americana folk in my opinion. Verse/verse/chorus/verse/chorus/bridge/chorus/instrumental outro is not contemporary country radio friendly. The song is well over four minutes long which pretty much makes it destined to be an album cut. As a rule of thumb the closer you are to three minutes your chances of radio airplay go up and the closer you are to four minutes those chances go down. This song is closer to five minutes than four minutes. The third verse is a mixture of verse one and verse two and it doesn't add anything new to the story line. My advice is do not have a third verse or re-write the third verse and add new info, action and imagery. If you delete verse three the form would be verse/chorus/verse/chorus/bridge/chorus and you would be closer to four minutes long than five minutes long. Starting a song with two long verses goes against most commercial guidelines but it is acceptable in Americana folk. Ending the second verse with the hook is also indicative of Americana folk. The song ends but I'm not convinced the singer ever learned how to be a man. The song doesn't point out what makes a man a man in his eyes. I really like the retro feel of this song. My guess is that baby boomers will also like this style of Americana folk rock. Strong melodies, catchy and memorable. I love the instrumental track and your vocal. The song sounds authentic. If you are hoping to pitch this to other artists keep in mind that the majority of Alternative Americana folk artists write their own songs and very few ever record outside material that they didn't have a hand in writing.

Quote From Pro: Allison Bolton brings the authentic sound of retro 60's Americana folk rock in the styles of Arlo Guthrie and Bob Dylan to the present day. Baby boomers as well as all fans of Americana will enjoy Allison Bolton's music.

TO BE A MAN by allison bolton

allison bolton

Broadjam Artist: allison bolton
Song: TO BE A MAN

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)

Pro General Comments: This song reminds me of retro Americana folk from the 60's. The steel guitar is country but a harmonica could easily replace the steel guitar. The form structure is very Americana folk in my opinion. Verse/verse/chorus/verse/chorus/bridge/chorus/instrumental outro is not contemporary country radio friendly. The song is well over four minutes long which pretty much makes it destined to be an album cut. As a rule of thumb the closer you are to three minutes your chances of radio airplay go up and the closer you are to four minutes those chances go down. This song is closer to five minutes than four minutes. The third verse is a mixture of verse one and verse two and it doesn't add anything new to the story line. My advice is do not have a third verse or re-write the third verse and add new info, action and imagery. If you delete verse three the form would be verse/chorus/verse/chorus/bridge/chorus and you would be closer to four minutes long than five minutes long. Starting a song with two long verses goes against most commercial guidelines but it is acceptable in Americana folk. Ending the second verse with the hook is also indicative of Americana folk. The song ends but I'm not convinced the singer ever learned how to be a man. The song doesn't point out what makes a man a man in his eyes. I really like the retro feel of this song. My guess is that baby boomers will also like this style of Americana folk rock. Strong melodies, catchy and memorable. I love the instrumental track and your vocal. The song sounds authentic. If you are hoping to pitch this to other artists keep in mind that the majority of Alternative Americana folk artists write their own songs and very few ever record outside material that they didn't have a hand in writing.

Quote From Pro: Allison Bolton brings the authentic sound of retro 60's Americana folk rock in the styles of Arlo Guthrie and Bob Dylan to the present day. Baby boomers as well as all fans of Americana will enjoy Allison Bolton's music.

Teardrop in the Rain (vocals) by Mary P. Carter

Mary P. Carter

Broadjam Artist: Mary P. Carter
Song: Teardrop in the Rain (vocals)

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)

Pro General Comments: very dark and melancholic. sad and lonely singer prays for rain so her lover won't see her cry in the rain.good prosody. the song is slow but your melody kept me interested.the chorus rhyme could be stronger...i would not use A rhymes especially after ending the verse with A rhymes.this song might find a home in a music placement company or music library for movies and television...this will work for the UK and Ireland as well as Appalachian country in the USA. speed it up a few more bpm's .I like the unpredictable phrasing and chord progression...very emotional and moving...The piano sounds great and adds a lot to the arrangement but be careful in making it too busy...in this genre simplicity is a major factor. You want the listener to focus on the words and melody not on the piano accompaniment.

Quote From Pro: Mary Carter has the talent and skill to write a unique blend of Americana folk with Celtic influences. She can take a song of heartbreak and sorrow and make it interesting touching and emotional and show a ray of sunshine that offers hope. She is not jaded by commercialism and cookie cutter formula songs. Her music is real and the listener will be moved by its innocence and honesty.

Teardrop in the Rain (vocals) by Mary P. Carter

Mary P. Carter

Broadjam Artist: Mary P. Carter
Song: Teardrop in the Rain (vocals)

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)

Pro General Comments: very dark and melancholic. sad and lonely singer prays for rain so her lover won't see her cry in the rain.good prosody. the song is slow but your melody kept me interested.the chorus rhyme could be stronger...i would not use A rhymes especially after ending the verse with A rhymes.this song might find a home in a music placement company or music library for movies and television...this will work for the UK and Ireland as well as Appalachian country in the USA. speed it up a few more bpm's .I like the unpredictable phrasing and chord progression...very emotional and moving...The piano sounds great and adds a lot to the arrangement but be careful in making it too busy...in this genre simplicity is a major factor. You want the listener to focus on the words and melody not on the piano accompaniment.

Quote From Pro: Mary Carter has the talent and skill to write a unique blend of Americana folk with Celtic influences. She can take a song of heartbreak and sorrow and make it interesting touching and emotional and show a ray of sunshine that offers hope. She is not jaded by commercialism and cookie cutter formula songs. Her music is real and the listener will be moved by its innocence and honesty.

This Means War by Mary Jennings

Mary Jennings

Broadjam Artist: Mary Jennings
Song: This Means War

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Jonathan Weiss (Music Supervisor, A&R)

Pro General Comments: Chorus is recognizable and overall has noticeable sectional contrast between verse and chorus sections. Verse and chorus melody are pretty similar in tone in terms of being in the same dynamic range and melodic structure. Chorus is pretty strident sounding in terms of the lyrics themselves (this means war) and the delivery which is somewhat aggressive in tonality. Pretty innovative background vocal arrangement which has the ability to soften up the more aggressively styled lead vocal phrasing and overall tone. Instrumental track and overall production is contemporary sounding and has current sounding percussion, bass and keyboard samples being used. Bridge section also helps to break up the verse and chorus sections. Vocal rhythm during verses is pretty staccato sounding which also moves it towards a more aggressive and familiar sounding style.

Quote From Pro: Contemporary sounding arrangement and confident sounding vocal delivery make this song an appealing relationship based song that has an overall current sound.