Disconnected (vocals) by Mary P. Carter

Mary P. Carter

Broadjam Artist: Mary P. Carter
Song: Disconnected (vocals)

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)

Pro General Comments: Mary, I really liked your vocal...you are showing a lot of improvement...the melodies are all well crafted...catchy and memorable...the sound of the drum machine is hurting the song...the piano is OK but nothing great...your vocal is the best part of the song...try to avoid cliches where possible...old lines that have been used in thousands of other songs won't get you noticed as a creative songwriter...I like the hook...one word hooks are good...the song has a retro groove and feel...good rhyme good meter and good phrasing...a few more details might help the story line...the demo sounds very basic...If you want to pitch this to movies and television or to a major artist the instrumental has to be stronger in my opinion...the drums are really thin and sound like a basic drum machine program that comes with a keyboard...even with the thin demo the song sounds pretty good because of your vocal...good job...

Quote From Pro: Mary has the soul and emotion of a classic R&B singer from the 60's. Her melodies are catchy and memorable and will touch the heart of everyone who lived through the early Motown years. She is constantly improving her craft.

She Slipped Away by RandBpro

RandBpro

Broadjam Artist: RandBpro
Song: She Slipped Away

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Doug Diamond (Music Supervisor, Engineer, Producer, Composer )

Pro General Comments: Hi Jim -Thanks for letting me know about your song, "She Slipped Away". I've enjoyed listening to it over and over for the review. It certainly has a 1970s Folk type sound and arrangement, a-la the artists I mentioned above (Jim Croce, Cat Stevens, Paul Simon, James Taylor, Jackson Browne), so you're in good company. Again, good track.I can tell you've put a lot of work into this song and I'm sure it's given you a lot of satisfaction seeing it come to its fruition.The performances, both instrumentally and vocally are all excellent. I don't think I'd change a thing from that perspective.The arrangement as you have it is also very good. I think the strings are my favorite parts. They're done very well. Not sure if they're real or not, but the important thing is, if they're not, they sure *sound* like it. My guess is they are only because you'd have to be an incredible programmer/synthesist to get anything close to this. Nice work. So, that said, as you know, the arrangement and instruments you choose have a lot to do with the emotional value a song has - that connection to the listener - the thing that makes them want to hear it over and over... that's a combination of several things. Yes, the performances and quality of the vocal as well as the instruments an sound in general, with the melody or "hook" being the main thing the listener connects with. Based on that, if you were to create a line graph of this song's emotional value from beginning to end, in my opinion, it would mostly be a straight line not a lot of rises in emotion or the ebbs and flows I'd like to see. Ballads are tricky. They really need to be emotional to be effective. This song is emotional to a degree, but I don't think it connects fully like it should. I expected to hear a huge swell at some point near the end, with a big emotional payoff - on a bridge perhaps. Again though, the straight line. I'd like to hear/feel more of a peak about 3/4 of the way through with a real payoff coming in the chorus (or a bridge as I mentioned). Instead, it sort of stays flat-lined all the way. The vocals do a good job of creating some emotion, so don't get me wrong it is there, just not quite what I'd like to hear - or expect to hear... coming from a music pro who listens for a living.Lyrically, I think this song is extremely unique in that I don't think I've heard many songs about parents' empty nest-type situations. That said, I think the third verse is a little bit confusing... it sounds like the girl has died, when in fact, she's just left her home with her parents to find her way in the world - something we all do. The parents act like their lives are over because the girl's left. While this may be the case for some parents, it does not portray a health relationship, you know? I think it casts the singer/artist in a negative light in certain respects. Just something to think about... to me the song should showcase how the girl is going to be happy making her own way in the world instead of how sad the parents are like they're distraught. When in fact, it's a new chapter for *them* too. Does that make sense? I think the premise needs to be tweaked in that regard.

Quote From Pro: "She Slipped Away" is an excellent song about a girl leaving her home, heading out in the world to make her own path. Very unique concept. Great performances and arrangements. This song could fit in the exact, right sync situation.

She Slipped Away by RandBpro

RandBpro

Broadjam Artist: RandBpro
Song: She Slipped Away

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Doug Diamond (Music Supervisor, Engineer, Producer, Composer )

Pro General Comments: Hi Jim -Thanks for letting me know about your song, "She Slipped Away". I've enjoyed listening to it over and over for the review. It certainly has a 1970s Folk type sound and arrangement, a-la the artists I mentioned above (Jim Croce, Cat Stevens, Paul Simon, James Taylor, Jackson Browne), so you're in good company. Again, good track.I can tell you've put a lot of work into this song and I'm sure it's given you a lot of satisfaction seeing it come to its fruition.The performances, both instrumentally and vocally are all excellent. I don't think I'd change a thing from that perspective.The arrangement as you have it is also very good. I think the strings are my favorite parts. They're done very well. Not sure if they're real or not, but the important thing is, if they're not, they sure *sound* like it. My guess is they are only because you'd have to be an incredible programmer/synthesist to get anything close to this. Nice work. So, that said, as you know, the arrangement and instruments you choose have a lot to do with the emotional value a song has - that connection to the listener - the thing that makes them want to hear it over and over... that's a combination of several things. Yes, the performances and quality of the vocal as well as the instruments an sound in general, with the melody or "hook" being the main thing the listener connects with. Based on that, if you were to create a line graph of this song's emotional value from beginning to end, in my opinion, it would mostly be a straight line not a lot of rises in emotion or the ebbs and flows I'd like to see. Ballads are tricky. They really need to be emotional to be effective. This song is emotional to a degree, but I don't think it connects fully like it should. I expected to hear a huge swell at some point near the end, with a big emotional payoff - on a bridge perhaps. Again though, the straight line. I'd like to hear/feel more of a peak about 3/4 of the way through with a real payoff coming in the chorus (or a bridge as I mentioned). Instead, it sort of stays flat-lined all the way. The vocals do a good job of creating some emotion, so don't get me wrong it is there, just not quite what I'd like to hear - or expect to hear... coming from a music pro who listens for a living.Lyrically, I think this song is extremely unique in that I don't think I've heard many songs about parents' empty nest-type situations. That said, I think the third verse is a little bit confusing... it sounds like the girl has died, when in fact, she's just left her home with her parents to find her way in the world - something we all do. The parents act like their lives are over because the girl's left. While this may be the case for some parents, it does not portray a health relationship, you know? I think it casts the singer/artist in a negative light in certain respects. Just something to think about... to me the song should showcase how the girl is going to be happy making her own way in the world instead of how sad the parents are like they're distraught. When in fact, it's a new chapter for *them* too. Does that make sense? I think the premise needs to be tweaked in that regard.

Quote From Pro: "She Slipped Away" is an excellent song about a girl leaving her home, heading out in the world to make her own path. Very unique concept. Great performances and arrangements. This song could fit in the exact, right sync situation.

Fall out of Love by Daniel

Daniel

Broadjam Artist: Daniel
Song: Fall out of Love

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Diana Williamson (Songwriter, Music Supervisor)

Pro General Comments: As you probably know- I don't comment on instrumentation as my expertise lies in overall vision, marketability, lyrics, hooks, etc..I accidentally had 3 versions somehow playing at all different times at once and thought there really needs to be some new arrangements to this song- ha ha.. Til I realized what was going on...it was my fault...Good rhyme scheme from the outset, important- for the catchy factor. Strings come in nicely. Vocals compliment the vibe of the song. If you had time to experiment,- adding a female bg vocal might add a nice dynamic?The arrangements work nicely, building the ebb and flow in all the right places. You know when you are reviewing and nothing "stops you" that the song is solid. It just flowed in all the right places. This is one of the hardest things to achieve- so you are definitely on the right track.My only suggestion- is that it is a tad hard to follow the lyric at some points. Perhaps it's a mix thing? It doesn't really bother me though and I'm a lyricist -because the flow feels so good.To me -for a song placement - (the era of the movie)- I can see girls dressed up like Pat Benetar (vibe) but it can also go more modern. But the good thing about this is- if you have a song that fits a time period from the past- you have less competition- as others are trying to write the more modern and flavor of the moment tracks. Also uptempo songs are easier to place- and even though it has a "sad topic" it has an "up" feel- so this will help you in placements. Good luck and keep on writing! You have all the necessary tools.

Quote From Pro: Boisterous feel good rock song would fit nicely in a club scene/for film/TVplacements.

Fall out of Love by Daniel

Daniel

Broadjam Artist: Daniel
Song: Fall out of Love

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Diana Williamson (Songwriter, Music Supervisor)

Pro General Comments: As you probably know- I don't comment on instrumentation as my expertise lies in overall vision, marketability, lyrics, hooks, etc..I accidentally had 3 versions somehow playing at all different times at once and thought there really needs to be some new arrangements to this song- ha ha.. Til I realized what was going on...it was my fault...Good rhyme scheme from the outset, important- for the catchy factor. Strings come in nicely. Vocals compliment the vibe of the song. If you had time to experiment,- adding a female bg vocal might add a nice dynamic?The arrangements work nicely, building the ebb and flow in all the right places. You know when you are reviewing and nothing "stops you" that the song is solid. It just flowed in all the right places. This is one of the hardest things to achieve- so you are definitely on the right track.My only suggestion- is that it is a tad hard to follow the lyric at some points. Perhaps it's a mix thing? It doesn't really bother me though and I'm a lyricist -because the flow feels so good.To me -for a song placement - (the era of the movie)- I can see girls dressed up like Pat Benetar (vibe) but it can also go more modern. But the good thing about this is- if you have a song that fits a time period from the past- you have less competition- as others are trying to write the more modern and flavor of the moment tracks. Also uptempo songs are easier to place- and even though it has a "sad topic" it has an "up" feel- so this will help you in placements. Good luck and keep on writing! You have all the necessary tools.

Quote From Pro: Boisterous feel good rock song would fit nicely in a club scene/for film/TVplacements.

Fall out of Love by Daniel

Daniel

Broadjam Artist: Daniel
Song: Fall out of Love

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)

Pro General Comments: attention grabbing toe tapping building spirited rousing vibrant rhythmic pulsating rocking grooving optimistic fast grooving positive confident pop rock uptempo radio friendly song. I love your vocal. It's very well done. lively in tune with high energy and lots of emotion. I couldn't understand all the lyrics and that was disappointing because i really wanted to hear the words that went along with these great melodies. I kept waiting to hear the hook but i only heard it once and it wasn't in the chorus. If it was there it was covered by the guitars and drums...nice chord changes...really well done demo as far as overall commercial sound quality. I would prefer the vocal be a little more out front to make the lyrics easier to understand. The arrangement was unpredictable but that kept me interested and I stayed interested till long after the song was over. The melody stuck in my head. This is very radio friendly.

Quote From Pro: Daniel has the vocal chops and the musical skill to be a force in the pop rock world. His voice is full of emotion and his melodies are catch and memorable. I will not be surprised to hear his songs on the radio or his music in movies television and commercials.

Heal Me by Christopher Yamsek

Christopher Yamsek

Broadjam Artist: Christopher Yamsek
Song: Heal Me

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Joe Vitale (Producer, Songwriter, Drummer)

Pro General Comments: Hey Christopher....Thanks so much for sending me this song to review. I do remember meeting you....I've listened to it a few times now and it really grows on you !! This story can be told forever it seems. No matter how you say it, it hits home with so many folks !! I especially love the instrumentation. It fits the lyrics and mood so well. This is a great vibe and so easy to listen to. BRAVO !!

Quote From Pro: "Heal Me" by Christopher Yamsek is a very moving song. It in itself is very healing as you listen to the lyrics. We ALL need a song like this to hold on to. We ALL have need for healing on all levels. I believe Christopher has something very special here....Something we should all hear and hold close to our heart...Well done my friend !!

revenge by max quaini

max quaini

Broadjam Artist: max quaini
Song: revenge

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)

Pro General Comments: The hook revenge didn't fit the positive uplifting vibe that your music sends. Revenge brings to my mind a darker more sinister vibe maybe using minor chords and a more pulsating groove anticipating impending pain.these are important points when choosing a song title. For the reasons i stated I think Sweet Revenge is a stronger hook and fits the mood of your music better. You are developing your own style which is a good thing...keep breaking your level of comfortableness. What I mean by that is keep trying new things and stay in the red danger of overheating zone. It's a lot more fun to take chances and break down self imposed boundaries. The break down section is a good example...you should try to double the speed of that guitar lick the second half,show off your finger speed. The overall mix is very strong.I love the melodic theme.Theme and variations,what a concept,it still works after hundreds of years. This is a very commercial song that should find a place if you pitch it to music libraries and music placement companies for use in movies television commercials video games etc. Your production quality sounds very professional (mastered) There are several places in this arrangement where you can be unpredictable. Regardless this sounds great. Experiment and try as many options as you can. Record 15 second cues, 30 second cues, one minute edits with a hard ending and full tracks. The percussion and bass line need to be every bit as unpredictable as your guitar lead. The house is only as strong as it's foundation. Build it from the bottom up.

Quote From Pro: Max Quaini is quickly developing a unique style based on original catchy memorable melodic themes. He has the talent and skill to be a guitar virtuoso who will leave his mark in the music world.

revenge by max quaini

max quaini

Broadjam Artist: max quaini
Song: revenge

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Robert Dellaposta (Writer, A&R, Publisher)

Pro General Comments: The hook revenge didn't fit the positive uplifting vibe that your music sends. Revenge brings to my mind a darker more sinister vibe maybe using minor chords and a more pulsating groove anticipating impending pain.these are important points when choosing a song title. For the reasons i stated I think Sweet Revenge is a stronger hook and fits the mood of your music better. You are developing your own style which is a good thing...keep breaking your level of comfortableness. What I mean by that is keep trying new things and stay in the red danger of overheating zone. It's a lot more fun to take chances and break down self imposed boundaries. The break down section is a good example...you should try to double the speed of that guitar lick the second half,show off your finger speed. The overall mix is very strong.I love the melodic theme.Theme and variations,what a concept,it still works after hundreds of years. This is a very commercial song that should find a place if you pitch it to music libraries and music placement companies for use in movies television commercials video games etc. Your production quality sounds very professional (mastered) There are several places in this arrangement where you can be unpredictable. Regardless this sounds great. Experiment and try as many options as you can. Record 15 second cues, 30 second cues, one minute edits with a hard ending and full tracks. The percussion and bass line need to be every bit as unpredictable as your guitar lead. The house is only as strong as it's foundation. Build it from the bottom up.

Quote From Pro: Max Quaini is quickly developing a unique style based on original catchy memorable melodic themes. He has the talent and skill to be a guitar virtuoso who will leave his mark in the music world.

Stand by me – Cover by Junior

Junior

Broadjam Artist: Junior
Song: Stand by me - Cover

Broadjam Pro Reviewer:
Diana Williamson (Songwriter, Music Supervisor)

Pro General Comments: Dear Junior:Wow. I really like the intensity of your performance. You have a great feel and timbre in your tone, especially in the softer moments. This is a great song choice - it suits you, which is half the battle. You can definitely make this into something and I think it's really smart of you to ask about it. Have you ever heard Somewhere over the Rainbow by Israel (it became a huge hit- it was all about that slinky- mysterious vibe -https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V1bFr2SWP1I) And you have an intensity kinda similar- it hits the nerves- which is great. You may also want to check out Julian Lennon - to see if there is anything you can learn from his styling.

Quote From Pro: Vocalist has a great heartfelt intensity,